Is punishment children good way to teach them? part 1
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According to the social media has gradually been spreading widely in our life. This information rapidly brings us to know school's situation. Therefore, some parents overly concern their children's status in school more over the years, so it affected us to establish a standard punishment benchmark in our society. Thus, I half agree that punishment is necessary to teach children to understand this distinction.
Basically, I think a punishment should not injury children's body or hurt their esteem. Because this kind of punishment is unhelpful for children, who gain better behavior or this experience from their mistakes. Also, I disagree that teachers use this sort of punishment to treat children, such as social isolation.
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Is punishment children good way to teach them? part 1
Is it a good way to teach children under the punishment?
Could you please review my writing, Thank you!Due to the impact of social media, our life has been impacted widely. This information rapidly These kinds of reports bring us to think about the education of school . Some parents overly concern about the condition of their children in school during these years, so it is hard to establish a standard punishment benchmark in our society. As for my opinion, I half agree with that the punishment is necessary to teach children to distinguish what things they can do.
Basically, I think a punishment should not injury children's body and hurt their esteem. It is because this kind of punishment is bad for children, however, a useful punishment let children learn a lot from their mistakes and keep a good behaviour. Also, I disagree that teachers use this sort of punishment, such as discouraging children, to avoid talking with children.
你好，我改的不是很专业，也是还有错误。我觉得雅思作文主要是逻辑和条理要清楚，point很重要。。
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