A big scare with a happy ending
Fortunately I have never had any serious accident but I have been witness to some of them.
Today, I am going to tell once where I really felt powerless and frustrated although I did everything I could and I think that it was worth the effort.
That happened in a supermarket 15 years ago. I remember I was in the fruit aisle when suddenly someone started to scream. I got closer although I felt petrified when I saw that woman lying on the floor/ collapsed and a lovely ten-year-old girl by her. The first thing I did hastlily was to call the emergency services while I was checking whether she was breathing or not. So I knelt next to that unconcious woman and fortunately I checked that she was breathing, at least, she did it at the beginning. The second thing that I did was to tilt her head backwards so that her tongue wasn't blocking her airway.
I asked the girl what had happened but she was so scared that she couldn't stop trembling. When she managed to calm down she was able to tell me that a few minutes earlier than her mother passed out, she had been complaining about a sudden pain in her chest, back and arm. Definitely, I knew that she was having/suffering a heart attack. Suddenly, the mother got worse and stopped breathing. I realized that she was suffering another stronger attack but I didn't want to tell the truth to that poor girl, I felt even much more scared than she was at that moment. While we were waiting for the emergency services I began to performanced a CPR on her so I learnt how to do it long time ago when I worked in the hospital. I thought the sooner I did it, the better. Finally, the emergency services arrived in time and they managed to save her life and she was taken to the hospital. I learnt she came round as soon as the doctors gave her the proper treatment and she recovered quickly.
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A big scare with a happy ending.
Fortunately I have never had any serious accidents but I have been a witness to some. (of them.) (correct but not necessary)Today, I am going to tell you about a time once where I really felt powerless and frustrated although I did everything I could and I think that it was worth the effort.
That It happened in a supermarket 15 years ago. I remember that I was in the fruit aisle when suddenly someone started to scream. I got closer, although I felt petrified when I saw that there was a woman lying on the floor/ collapsed and a lovely ten-year-old girl by her. The first thing I did hastily was to call the emergency services while I was checking whether she was breathing or not. So I knelt next to that the unconscious woman and fortunately I checked realized that she was breathing, at least, she did it at in the beginning. The second thing that I did was to tilt her head backwards so that her tongue wasn't blocking her airway.
I asked the girl what had happened but she was so scared that she couldn't stop trembling. When she managed to calm down she was able to tell me that a few minutes earlier than before her mother passed out, she had been complaining about a sudden pain in her chest, back and arm. Definitely, I knew that she was having/suffering a heart attack. Suddenly, the mother got worse and stopped breathing. I realized that she was suffering another stronger attack but I didn't want to tell (the truth to) that poor girl, I felt even (much) more scared than she was at that moment. While we were waiting for the emergency services I began to perform CPR on her. so I had learned how to do it long time ago when I worked in the hospital. I thought the sooner I did it, the better. Finally, the emergency services arrived in time and they managed to save her life and she was taken to the hospital. I learned later she came round as soon as the doctors gave her the proper treatment and she recovered quickly.
The words in parenthesis could be omitted and therefore it would 'sound' more natural. Equally, the words in blue would make it more natural.
Excellent, your essay is almost perfect!
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hahahah, thank you so much, yes, it had been very exciting if it had been true, hahahah, sorry. I had to write about such a scared experience because I needed to practice that new vocabulary and I thought about writing that... I needed to imagine that situation and I felt terrified like that poor girl.
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wow, you did a great job reacting to this emergency. It is great you had the training to save her life. Bravo ;-)
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