Overall, nice job!  Here are some corrections/suggestions.

ARE WE WHAT WE EAT?

Food choices have changed enormously in the whelthier country wealthier countries over the last 20-30 years. Nowadays there is a huge variety of products we can choose from, and cooking is no longer required in order to provide a meal for the family. The way we live has affected our food choices in a great (great is ok, but the word "profound" would be even better) way, and it seems that we don't pay much attention to what we put in on our plates. The days when we all sat around the table eating fresh, home-made food with our family seem very far away (even better: seem like a distant memory).
Many people blame the our modern society for this these bad eating habits. Since people have to work long hours, and there isn't much time left to think about the right food to cook. Surely our busy life lives play a role in this situation, but are we sure that this isn't a matter of laziness as well? Can this abundance of ready meals have turned us in into lazy people?
Moreover, this these bad habits will reflect on young people.  infact In fact, children who are thaught  taught to eat badly from their parents and they are more likely to keep up continue with this unbalanced diet in their adulthood. In the long run this could led lead to a variety of health problems, such as obesity and diabetes. So If parents are uncapable incapable of setting an example, who should take the responsibility to do that? School should play a key role in teaching both parents and children how to eat well. Organizing some classes where parents and children are encouraged to cook together could be useful for both.

ARE WE WHAT WE EAT?

Food choices have changed enormously in the whelthier wealthier country  countries over the last 20-30 years. Nowadays there is a huge variety of products we can choose from and cooking is no longer required in order to provide a meal for the family. The way we live has affected our food choices in a great way, and it seems that we don't pay much attention to what we put in on our plates. The days when we all sat around the table eating fresh, home-made food with our family seem very far away.
Many people blame the modern society for this these bad eating habits, since people have to work long hours and there isn't much time left to think about the right food to cook. (This is a bit of a run on sentence. I might write... Many people have to work long hours, and  don't have much time to think about what to cook. So, they blame modern society for these/their bad eating habits.) Surely our busy life lives play a role in this situation, but are we sure that this isn't a matter of laziness as well? Can this abundance of ready meals have turned us into lazy people?
Moreover, this these bad habits will reflect on young people, ; infact, children are thaught to eat badly from their parents and. Therefore, they are more likely to keep up with this unbalanced diet in their adulthood. In the long run, this could lead to a variety of health problems, such as obesity and diabetes. So, if parents are uincapable of setting an example, who should take the responsaibility to do that? Schools should play a key role in teaching both parents and children how to eat well. Organizing some classes where parents and children are iencouraged to cook together could be useful for both.


Denise, really well done. I was thoroughly impressed. You write with a strong voice. 

Did you proof read? Many of the mistakes you made are easily corrected. Regardless, well done. Keep on keepin' on. 

Scott

ARE WE WHAT WE EAT?

Food choices have changed enormously in the wealthier  countries over the last 20-30 years. Nowadays there is a huge variety of products we can choose from and cooking is no longer required in order to prepare a meal for the family. The way we live has affected our food choices in a great way, and it seems that we don't pay much attention to what we put in our plates. The days when we all used to sit around the table eating fresh, home-made food with our families seem very far.
Many people blame the modern society for these bad eating habits, since people have to work for many hours and there isn't much time left to think about the right food to cook. Surely our busy life play a role in this situation, but are we sure that it isn't a matter of laziness as well? Could this abundance in ready meals have turned  us into lazy people?
Moreover, these bad habits will reflect on young people, in fact, children are taught to eat badly because of their parents and they are more likely to keep up with this unbalanced diet in their adulthood. In the long run this can lead to a variety of health problems, such as obesity and diabetes. So if parents are incapable of being an example  then who should be in charge to do that? School should play a key role in teaching both parents and children how to eat well. Holding some classes where parents and children are encouraged to cook together could be useful for both.