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An application letter Hi!Could you please correct this non-real application letter? It would be used to apply for a job in a music event in England. Apart from mistakes in grammar, spelling, etc. it would be great any corrections regarding whether the sentences are appropiate for the contexts and that kind of things. Thanks! Dear Mr Richards, I write this e-mail in order to apply for the festival staff job I have seen announced on the internet. I have a university degree in Public Relations as well as a master in Coaching which could be very useful in order to manage crowds. Apart from that, I have been practising martial arts since I was a child which, together with lifting weights and running, help me keep fit. My english level is upper intermediate according to Cambdridge University. Regarding my experience, I worked for an event organizer company for more than ten years which provided me with relevant experience in organizing events and dealing with crowds. In additon to this, last summer I worked as a security guard in a famous overcrowded disco in the Balear islands. I think my personality makes me suitable for the job as I am outgoing, steady and straightforward. My friends say I am a bit bossy what could come in handy to cope with situations where people show bad behaviour or do things they are not allowed to. You can find attached my full CV. Please do not heasitate to contact me if you need any further information. Best wishes, Roberto Carlos

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An application letter

Hi!Could you please correct this non-real hypothetical application letter? It would be used to apply for a job in at a music event in England. Apart from mistakes in grammar, spelling, etc. it would be great any corrections regarding whether the sentences are appropriate for the contexts and that kind of things would be great. Thanks!

Dear Mr Richards,

I write this e-mail in order to apply for the festival staff job I have seen announced on the internet.
I have a university degree in public relations as well as a master's in coaching which could be very useful in order to manage crowds. Apart from that, I have been practicing martial arts since I was a child which, together with lifting weights and running, help me keep fit. My English level is upper intermediate according to Cambdridge University.
Regarding my experience, I worked for an event organizer organizing/organization (either is fine) company for more than ten years which provided me with relevant experience in organizing events and dealing with crowds. In addition to this, last summer I worked as a security guard in a famous overcrowded (famous, overcrowded or famously overcrowded) disco in the Balear islands.
I think my personality makes me suitable for the job as I am outgoing, steady and straightforward. (People aren't usually described as straightforward. I would just say you are outgoing and steady, or another good word here would be even-tempered). My friends say I am a bit bossy, which what could come in handy to cope with situations where people show bad behaviour or do things they are not allowed to.
You can find attached my full CV. Please do not heasitate to contact me if you need any further information.
Best wishes,
Roberto Carlos


Muy bien escrito, Jorge. Tu ingles es casi perfecto! Escibeme si tienes otras preguntas. 

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