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Comment of essay: Wow, it is a pretty good essay, well-structured and smoothly-written. Please pay attention to plural and singular forms of noun.
(It would be more native if you could compress this essay with less words and less clauses by reconstructing some sentences, especially for third paragraph )
BTW, as a Japanese learner, the most difficult part I have encountered is to understand what people really mean. (Sometimes, it makes me feel "why they make a simple thing complex?"). Guess I need to read some books about Japanese culture and history.
Note: All words yellowed are inserted, greened are deleted and blued are "recommended" to replace underlined parts.
please correct my essay!
How Can You Gain New Cross-cultural Skills, Sensitivity, and Awareness While Studying Abroad?Many students in my university want to study abroad, and some of them say the purpose is to gain new cross-cultural skills, sensitivity, and awareness, so I’m going to describe how to understand other cultures.
First way to understand other country’s culture is that to check the country’s culture in advance and understand the background. For example, almost everyone has smartphone, so it’s easy to check a lot of thing whenever and wherever on the Internet, and there are a variety of students’ experiences and stories of the people who live there. That’s why , you can learn many things through reading these texts. When you get some information from websites, you can learn the background , as well. For example, even if there are some things that you can’t accept at a first glance, you will be able to understand to some extent after you realize the background. Because of the investigation about the culture and background, you can prevent accidents concerning misunderstanding and ignorance.
Second, when you study abroad and face troubles which you can’t accept, you shouldn’t put up with the hardship and ask the reason. No matter how much you investigate about other country, it’s quite difficult (impossible) to know everything about the country (it), so it’s natural that you face troubles in a foreign country. For example, when you study abroad, you might have a trouble about communication. In Japan, everyone guess each other, so it’s common that there is a big gap between what you said and what you really mean. On the contrary, most of foreign people say what they really think directly. That means that Japanese can’t (don't exactly) convey what they want to say and foreign people can’t understand it because they aren’t used to guess what other people really want to say. At that time, if you apologize and blame yourself, you will be depressed and the experience makes you not want to communicate with foreign people. In order not to feel so, you shouldn’t endure the hardship. Not only that, you should consider the reason why foreign people don’t understand you and what you should do. For instance, if you feel foreign people don’t understand you or they say what they want to say too directly, you should ask the reason or try to find the answer. When you realize the reason or find the answer, you will be able to live a better life.
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