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Working women Although some people may believe that women should stay at home and do housework when they get married. It is far more realistic for women to work continuously. There are two main reasons which are productivity and life enrichment. The first reasons why women should keep working is that they are still able to make higher performance for firms regardless they are married or not. Firms are as profit organization, it should create benefits constantly in order to survival. To recruit freshmen are costly and time consuming, by contrast, keep hiring woman who is married are not only valuable for company that they are capable of practical skills in their field, and also it will contribute to affect surrounding coworkers that firms are care them because they is important. moreover, women who remain in workplace is good for their families because family’s daily expenditures are huge. They have to Think of many things such as borrow loan to buy a house, considering how to raise their children. Those things which need to cost a tremendous account of money. Only a dual income families can afford to it. Therefore, women who are married should try to keep working for improve their value and monetary return.

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Working women

Although some people may believe that women should stay at home and do housework when they get married. It is realistic  to expect women to work continuously. There are two main reasons which are productivity and life enrichment.
The first  reason why women should keep working is that they are still able to make higher performance for firms regardless of the fact that they are married or not. Firms are considered as profit organization,  which create benefits constantly in order to  survive. Recruiting apprentices are is costly and time-consuming  while keeping hiring  women who are married  is not only valuable for the company that they are capable of developing practical skills in their field,   but also influences surrounding coworkers to believe that they are respected . The second reason is that the fact that women who remain in workplace is good for their families because  they help ease the burden of household expenses.  People have to think of many things such as repaying a loan to buy a house, considering how to raise their children. Those things  need   a tremendous  amount of money. Only a dual income families can afford  it (or afford to do it). Therefore,  married women should  keep working for  their success and their families


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Firstly, thank you for your comments. for your comments, I perhaps couldn't say it's wrong, but I just curious that have you ever traveled to any countries in Asia and living experience? At least, I do have. I definitely didn't mean to offense or disrespect, I just wrote what I saw and felt, and I strongly suggest you should more broaden your mind. lastly, thank you shared your views again.
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I hesitate to jump in and make language corrections here because I'm distracted by a couple of concerns (and I'm also curious who the audience is for this). First, I'm not sure how factually correct this is, for example it's untrue that only a dual income family can afford to buy a house. And, secondly, while I don't claim to be familiar with every culture on Earth, I'd expect a native English-speaking audience to feel that we're a good half-century beyond even countenancing the archaic suggestion in the first sentence. So this piece, at least to me, comes across as old-fashioned at best, and disrespectful at worst. Those concerns feel more important to me than correct grammar and spelling. If it were me, I'd go through the piece and re-write it without mentioning the sexes at all and I'd just make it about why having a job is a good idea. If that undermines the point of the piece, then I don't have a good answer for that. :)

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