A short essay
If Edison Thomas had not made such a breakthrough - create the telephone, there would not have various kinds of magic mobile phones in mounting numbers nowadays. The spirit of creativity is like a great giant who leads us to the top of the mountain of scientific. As Samuel Johnson, the respected British writer, once said "Creativity power is the first requisite to great undertakings." Consequently, due importance should be attached to innovation.
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A short essay
If Thomas Edison had not made such a breakthrough[emdash]creating the telephone[emdash]there would not nowadays be various kinds of magic mobile phones in mounting numbers nowadays. The spirit of creativity is like a great giant who leads us to the top of the mountain of scientific discovery [or "of science"]. As Samuel Johnson, the respected British writer, once said "Creative power is the first requisite to great undertakings." Consequently, due importance should be attached to innovation.[Very good! :) Btw, saying "a great giant" sounds ok here, because it does seem to add emphasis. But bear in mind that "great" is a bit redundant. What other kinds of giant are there? A giant is big, and "great" often means big, too (although it *can* just mean "a big value" of any metric). An expression like that is often called a "tautology". If you can avoid them then that's even better. For emphasis how about picking something that can't be interpreted as being redundant with "giant" such as "implacable" or "unstoppable".]
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Thank you for your advice!!
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Just a little note on names: In most european countries (at least the ones I know), the first name is put before the last name. Thus it would probably be better to call him "Thomas Edison"
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