Describe a trip which was not up to your expectations.  On a recent national day, l went to Shandong with my parents to visit some unique landscapes. On our journey, we go  went through a really famous place called TaiErZhuang, it left a deep impression on me. However, because of raining the rain, we have had to change to another place. Of course, l also expected that this place is to be as good as the last one. Unfortunately, this place  it is was absolutely shabby place in my mind.  pretty shabby in my opinion. 

Describe a trip which was not up to your expectations.  On a recent national day, l went to Shandong with my parents to visit some unique landscapes. On our journey, we go  went through a really famous place called TaiErZhuang, it left a deep impression on me. However, because of raining the rain, we have had to go to another place. Of course, l also expected that this place is to be as good as the last one. Unfortunately, this place  it was really shabby.

This place is a national park, but the environment was not up to modern living standards, and the hotel we live stayed at is not so well.  wasn't very pleasant. Those big changes make me unhappy, and I suffered because of the bright sun and overcrowding. l had to sit at the table to do homework rather than play in the sand and enjoy the ocean waves in the ocean. Though l tried to make things better, it did not turn out favourably. We stayed there it for 2 days and finally left away from there.

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