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Writing Practice It is better to grow up with siblings than without. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. To be a only child in my family, I really envy my friends who has siblings. Every time I saw them talking with their brothers or sisters, I believe that siblings play an important role in their life. My friends always share their feelings, resources and ideas to their siblings. It seems like they has a best friends that would never betray them. So I think to grow up with brothers and sisters would be the most wonderful things in my life. Beside I jealous my friends, there are two reasons that makes me believe having siblings would help children to develop relationship between peers. The first one is have brothers or sisters could let the children know the difference between the genders. As we all know, the thinking between boys and girls is different. Girls like dolls and boys like cars, which seems to become the stereotype of the genders. So children usually learn the differences through the interaction with family. For example, my cousins they like cars when they are young, so I have learn some knowledge about the cars like engine, the cooling system, and of course the various brand such as Bugatti, Ferrari and so on. The second one, as I mentioned at the first paragraph, siblings could be the best friends in our life. The one knows everything and share their feelings since they were young. For me, sometimes I feel solitude when I stay at home alone, so that I truly need someone to chat with me. But in the modern society it seems not easy to meet someone who can stay with us when we feel alone. Everyone seems so busy that could not spend few minutes to talk with each other. Siblings are the family members and the true friends in everyone’s life. No one could have the connection so strong like siblings. To sum up, I agree that to grow up with siblings has the benefit to people. Have siblings not only help people to understand the world but also expand their visions. After all, family is always the strongest supporter in the world.

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Writing Practice

It is better to grow up with siblings than without. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

To Being an only child in my family, I really envy envied my friends who has had siblings. Every time I saw them talking with their brothers or sisters, I believed that siblings played an important role in their life. My friends always shared their feelings, resources and ideas to with their siblings. It seems like they has had a best friends that who would never betray them. So I think to growing up with brothers and sisters would be one of the most wonderful things in my life.
Besides I being jealous of my friends, there are two reasons that makes make me believe having siblings would help children to develop relationships between peers. The first one is have having brothers or sisters could let the children know the difference between the genders. As we all know, the thinking between boys and girls is different. Girls like dolls and boys like cars, which seems to become the stereotype of the genders. So children usually learn the differences through the interaction with family. For example, my cousins they   liked cars when they are were young, so I have learned some knowledge about the cars like car engines, the cooling systems, and of course the various brands, such as Bugatti, Ferrari and so on.

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The second one, as I mentioned at in the first paragraph, is that siblings could be the best friends in our life, the ones who knows know everything and have shared their feelings since they were young. For me, sometimes I feel solitude lonely when I stay at home alone by myself, so that I truly need someone with whom to chat with me. But in the modern society, it seems not easy difficult to meet someone who can stay with us when we feel alone. Everyone seems so too busy that could not to spend a few minutes to talk with each other. Siblings are the family members and the true friends in everyone’s life. No one could have the a connection so strong like as siblings.

To sum up, I agree that to grow up with siblings has the benefits to people. Have Siblings not only help people to understand the world, but also expand their visions. After all, family is always the strongest supporter support in the world.

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Writing Practice

It is better to grow up with siblings than without. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

To be Being an only child in my family, I really envy my friends who has have siblings. Every time I saw them talking with their brothers or sisters, I believe felt that siblings play an important role in their life lives. My friends always share their feelings, resources and ideas to with their siblings. It seems like they has have a best friends that would never betray them. So I think to grow up with brothers and sisters would be the most wonderful things in my life.

Beside I being jealous of my friends, there are two reasons that makes me believe having siblings would help children to develop relationships between peers. The first one is have brothers or sisters could let the children know the difference between the genders. As we all know, the thinking between boys and girls is different. Girls like dolls and boys like cars, which seems to become the stereotype of the genders. So children usually learn the differences through the interaction with family. For example, my cousins they liked cars when they are were young, so I have learn some knowledge about the cars like such as the engine, the cooling system, and of course the various brands such as Bugatti, Ferrari and so on.

The second one reason, as I mentioned at in the first paragraph, siblings could be the best friends in our life. The one person who knows everything and shares their feelings with since they were young. For me, sometimes I feel solitude solitary when I stay at home alone, so that I truly need someone to chat with me. But in the modern society it seems like it's not easy to meet someone who can stay with us when we feel alone. Everyone seems so busy that they could not spend few minutes to talk with each other. Siblings are the family members and the true friends in everyone’s life. No one could have the connection so as  strong like as siblings.
To sum up, I agree that to grow up with siblings has the benefit is beneficial to people. Have Having siblings not only helps people to understand the world but also to expand their visions. After all, family is always the strongest supporter in the world.

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This is an IELTS academic writing task 2. It is well-organized. I would assess it level 7. If you have time, consider including the opposing view. I know it is not required, but an evaluator may look kindly on it, and it would only take a couple of sentences. Of course, after stating an opposing view, immediately refute it.

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