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My ideal city I want to work After my graduation, the city which I would choose must has theses factors. Maybe the city wouldn't exist, it is just my imagination. The most important factors are good job market, for I have to support myself and pay my rent and other expenses. If one city has a good job market, it means the city is developing. So there are many elites coming to compete with ourselves. They will encourage us to work and perfect ourselves. The desire to advance of youth is momentous to us. The second factor is the comfortable environment, which includes many aspects, such as clear sky, green space, fresh air. There is no extreme weather like blizzard. The reason I think of the factor is that health is essential. I enjoy running outdoors when I am free. What's more, good environment is benefit us to work. The third is the complete transportation. Generally, we don't have enough money to buy a car to work. In most cases, we choose public transportation, such as buses, subways. In conclusion, I have to study hard so that I could work in my ideal city.

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The  ideal city where I want to work

After my graduation, the city which I would choose must have these factors. Maybe the city doesn't exist, it is just my imagination.
The most important factors are a good job market, for I have to support myself and pay my rent and other expenses. If one city has a good job market, it means the city is developing. So there are many elite people coming to compete with each other. They will encourage us to work and perfect ourselves. The desire to advance of youth is momentous to us. The second factor is a comfortable environment, which includes many aspects, such as clear sky, green space, fresh air. There is no extreme weather like blizzards. The reason I think of this factor is that health is essential. I enjoy running outdoors when I have free time. What's more, a good environment is beneficial to our work. The third is a complete transportation system. Generally, we don't have enough money to buy a car to go to work. In most cases, we choose public transport, such as buses and subways.
In conclusion, I have to study hard so that I can work in my ideal city.

Hello Junshan,

I think we would all like to find a place like this. I think the reality is that most people go where the work is and suffer the rest!

There was one sentence (orange) which I had trouble getting the sense of. Can you write it in a different way?

Bob

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