A loss Since I came to the USA, everything has been fresh for me. Even though New York is a remarkable city,which attracts different people from all over the world ,I still feel lonely sometimes .I mi

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Jinyan

A loss Since I came to the USA, everything has been fresh for me. Even though New York is a remarkable city,which attracts different people from all over the world ,I still feel lonely sometimes .I miss my parents in China and the city where I grew up and worked.I can't get a job here,and I don't have any friends to talk with .I think what I lost is called"sense of belonging".I don't feel that I belong to New York .I am just a guest.I must be careful with everything.up to now,I am afraid of withdrawing money from the bank and purchasing something I need .The lifestyle here is different .I know I must adjust myself to the new life ,but it takes time.

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Your writing is very good and hardly needs correction other than some punctuation and spacing. A couple small suggestions below. (And by the way, I know how you feel. I also am living in a different country where I don't feel I belong. Keep your head up!)

A loss

Since I came to the USA, everything has been fresh for me. Even though New York is a remarkable city,which attracts different people from all over the world ,I still feel lonely sometimes .I miss my parents in China and the city where I grew up and worked.I can't get a job here,and I don't have any friends to talk with .I think what I lost is called a "sense of belonging".I don't feel that I belong to New York .I am just a guest.I must be careful with everything.up to now,I am afraid of withdrawing money from the bank (this is ok but I might say, "Even now I am afraid...", or "I am still afraid...") and purchasing something I need .The lifestyle here is different .I know I must adjust myself to this new life ,but it takes time.

A loss

Since coming I came to the USA, everything has been fresh for me. Even though New York is a remarkable city, which attracts different people from all over the world ,I still feel lonely sometimes .I miss my parents in China and the city where I grew up and worked.I can't get a job here,and I don't have any friends to talk with .I think what I lost is called"sense of belonging".I don't feel that I belong to in New York .I am just a guest.I must be careful with everything.up to now,I am afraid of withdrawing money from the bank and purchasing something things I need .The lifestyle here is different .I know I must adjust myself to the this (or) my new life ,but it takes time.

Jinyan -- thanks for sharing this reflection! You have a poetic style and good vocabulary! One small comment so that you can continue to improve - "Even though New York is a remarkable city... " this sentence is a bit too long. It could be simpler - something like "New York is a remarkable city, attracting people from all over the world, but I still feel lonely sometimes."

You are right - it does take time to adjust to a new life. Your hard work at English means you will adjust! Good luck.

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