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the number of young people who live with their parents will increase in the future? INTRO: The relationship between young people and their families are gradually changing compared with old days due to valaety factors such as social environments, developing of Internet, and so on. It is true that the number of young people that still stay with there parents after they finish their educations are increasing and this phenomena are becoming significant social issue in Japan these days. There are two reasons to support this opinion. BODY1: First of all, There is a data that shows Japanese young people’s marriage aspiration is decreasing. that may affects to decrease the opportunity to separate from their parents. Usually, people will separate from their parents when they get marriage and start their new life with new family member. However, people who don’t get marriage are tend to live with their parents because there is no need to be separate. Thus, according to this deta, no wonder that people who live with their parents is increase in Japan. BODY2: Next, It is true that there is the type young people that called “NEET” in japan. That means Not in Education, Employment, or Training. As this term shows, they are completely depended to their parents in many way and usually these kind of people live with their parents together. CONCLUSION: Accoding to these reasons I support the opinion that the number of young people who live with their parents are increasing in future.

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The number of young people who live with their parents will increase in the future?

INTRO:
The relationship between young people and their families are gradually changing compared with the old days due to valuable factors such as social environments, development of the Internet, and so on. It is true that the number of young people that still stay with there parents after they finish their educations are increasing and this phenomena are becoming a significant social issue in Japan these days. There are two reasons to support this opinion.
BODY1:
First of all, There is a data that shows Japanese young people’s marriage aspiration is decreasing. That may affects to decrease the opportunity to separate from their parents. Usually, people will separate from their parents when they get married and start their new life with new family members. However, people who don’t get married are tend to live with their parents because there is no need to be separate. Thus, according to this data, no wonder that people who live with their parents are increasing in Japan.
BODY2:
Next, It is true that there is the a type of young people that called “NEET” in japan. That means Not in Education, Employment, or Training. As this term shows, they are completely depended to their parents in many ways and usually these kind of people live with their parents together.
CONCLUSION:
According to these reasons I support the opinion that the number of young people who live with their parents are increasing in the future.

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