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Should schol offer junk food? As regards whether school should offer junk food,there has been a heated discussion among the public in our society. Just as every coin has two sides,there is no exception for junk food.On the one hand,it is convenient to make .Whenever you need ,they can offer you faster than others.One more thing,mostly junk food is popular than healthy food because some students they don't like eat vegetables.On the other hand,junk food bring bad influences for our body,especially for students who is growing up.And if students can have balance diet then they will have healthy body which play an important role in life.With the remarkable advancement of society ,more and more people start focus on a healthy body.When it comes to school,every student should have a good habit in everything including eating. As far as I am concerned,under no circumstances should school undervalue the power of bulding a healthy eating habits. All in all,the school shouldn't offer junk food ".

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Should schools offer junk food?

As regards to whether schools should offer junk food, there has been a heated public discussion among the public in our society.
Just as every coin has two sides, there is no exception for junk food. On the one hand, it is convenient to make. Whenever you need to eat, junk food is quick and easy to get. ,they can offer you faster than others. One more thing In addition, mostly junk food is more popular than healthy food because some students they don't like to eat vegetables. On the other hand, junk food bring is a bad influences for on our body, especially for students who is are growing up.And If students can have a balanced diet, then they will have a healthy body, which plays an important role in life. With the remarkable advancement of society, more and more people start begin to focus on a healthy body. When it comes to school, every student should have a develop good habits in everything, including eating.
As far as I am concerned, under no circumstances should schools undervalue underestimate the power of building a healthy eating habits. All in all, the schools shouldn't offer junk food.


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