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Hello everyone. Today I would like to make a presentation about Picture 4.
I believe the first time many people see this picture, they associate it with railway stations, airports or our college. In this picture, a huge crowd flocks to the elevator though most of them have nothing on hand. Maybe they think it would be faster and more convenient. Only one person who carries 2 heavy bags chooses to go upstairs though the staircase is 3 times wider than the elevator. As a result of not crowding to the elevator, the person who go upstairs reaches the second floor more quickly. This reminds me of the way of life.
Human beings always attempt to reach their goal in an easier and faster way. Therefore, this way is crowded all the time. However, though the hard way is smooth, few people are willing to choose it. As a consequence, people who try to cover the harder way can reach their goal easier than who choose the shortcut. To make it clearly, I will take an example.
After graduation, a large number of graduates will find a job which just allows them to feed on themselves. But this kind of jobs is so easy to get that it is difficult for graduates to stand out among so many people. On the contrary, some of the graduates select to build a company themselves. The road is so hard but as few people go in it, sometimes it is the real shortcut to be successful.
The reason why I take this example is to tell everyone that the way you choose can decide on how you go through it. And the road which seems like the shortcut sometimes is the harder one. So everyone, when we face 2 choices, why not try to select the one which seems harder?
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I will join in an oral English competition so I need your help to corret and polish the article
Hello everyone. Today I would like to make a presentation about Picture 4.I believe this is the first time people will see this picture. They associate it with railway stations, airports or our colleges. In this picture, a huge crowd of people flocks to the elevator although most of them have nothing in their hands. Maybe they think it would be faster and more convenient this way. Only one person who carries 2 heavy bags chooses to take the stairs even though the staircase is 3 times wider than the elevator. As a result of not over crowding to the elevator, this person who chooses the stairs rather than the elevator, reaches the second floor more quickly than the others. This reminds me of the way life is.
Human beings always attempt to reach their goal in an easier and faster way. Therefore, this path is usually more crowded. However, although the hard way is smooth, few people are willing to choose it. As a consequence, people who choose the harder route can reach their goal more easily than those who choose the shortcut. To make it more clearly, I will give you an example.
After graduation, a large number of graduates will find a job which only allows them to feed on themselves. But this kind of jobs is so easy to get that it is difficult for graduates to stand out among so many people. On the other hand, some of the graduates will decide to build a company by themselves. This road is very hard but as few people go in it, sometimes it is the real shortcut to becoming successful.
The reason why I chose this example was to explain to everyone that the path you decide to choose can decide on how you make a difference to what you can achieve through it. And the road which seems like the shortcut can sometimes be the harder one. So everyone, when we you face 2 choices, why not try to select the one which seems harder?
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