can we corret me this composition?
My perfect Christmas is to be with my family and my girlfriend, they are my best gift. Also, I really like Christmas dinners because there is so much food and the atmosphere is amazing, we are very happy. After dinners the adolescents go out to the disco for fun. I am not especially Catholic but I like to spend time with my family and my friends because I live outside. Although it is a good time, we remember people who have already gone to heaven and long for their company, but the important thing is to enjoy with the family members who are still here.
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can someone help me and correct this composition? OR can someone correct my composition? OR can someone correct this composition for me? I think the latter is the closest to the Spanish yet is still correct. You could also use anyone instead of someone.
My perfect Christmas is to be with my family and my girlfriend, they are my best gift. Also, I really like Christmas dinners because there is so much food and the atmosphere is amazing, we are very happy. After dinners the adolescents go out to the disco for fun. I am not especially Catholic but I like to spend time with my family and my friends because I live outside. Although it is a good time, we remember people who have already gone to heaven and long for their company, but the important thing is to enjoy with the family members who are still here.Paul's corrections are right. I have concerns about the sentence which starts I am not especially Catholic. I want more explanation. I am not Catholic at all and I like to spend time with my family at Christmas! ('at all' in this sentence emphasises that I am not Catholic and I am using it to contrast your 'not especially Catholic') Does the Catholic church advocate that families reunite at Christmas? I would like you to explain why you have introduced that phrase before you write that you prefer to spend time with you family etc. I hope that my comment makes sense to you.
Can you find a better adjective than good (although it is a good time) joyful/wonderful etc - show off your vocabulary! I wonder whether the most important thing would enhance that last sentence. It is important that you remember your dead but more important to enjoy time (or the occasion) with the family members who are present.
Hope that has not confused you.
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can we corret me this composition?
My perfect Christmas is to be with my family and my girlfriend, they are my best gift. Also, I really like Christmas dinners because there is so much food and the atmosphere is amazing, we are very happy. After dinners (the dinner ) the adolescents go out to the disco for fun. I am not especially Catholic but I like to spend time with my family and my friends because I live outside (outside -> you leave out of the house, like in the backyard / away -> you leave in a diferent place). Although it is a good time, we remember people who have already gone to heaven and long for their company, but the important thing is to enjoy with the family members who are still here.0
can we correct me this composition?
My perfect Christmas is to be with my family and my girlfriend, they are my best gift. Also, I really like Christmas dinners because there is so much food and the atmosphere is amazing; we are very happy. After dinners the adolescents go out to the disco for fun. I am not especially Catholic but I like to spend time with my family and my friends because I live outside (think you mean 'away'?). Although it is a good time, we remember people who have already gone to heaven and long for their company, but the important thing is to enjoy your time with the family members who are still here.Want to progress faster?
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