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Script? of my speech (1) Good evening, my classmates and teacher. I'd like to start by introducing myself, my name is Carmen Marín. The subject of my presentation is the Mar Menor, his importance and recent environmental problems. Have you ever been there? When I was a child, parents always took their sons and daughter to this beaches, because of warm and calm water, it was perfect and safe, we enjoyed so much in that place. Why am I speaking in past? Because the situation has changed radically. I have chosen to speak about this because I’m from San Javier, next to the sea, this year’s media is very present the contamination of the Mar Menor and is a topic of habitual conversation in the Region. I have divided my presentation into 4 parts. In the first part I give brief information about the place, in the next section I will explain the importance of the Mar Menor as a tourist point of the region and his biodiversity. In part three, I am going to show the causes and consequences that provoke their current state. Finally, I’m going to comment the possible solutions that are proposed to solve this environmental catastrophe. Now let us turn to point one. Well, first of all, I know that all of you knows where is Mar Menor situated, but let me do a little presentation. Mar Menor is in the southeast of the region, and is surrounded by San Javier, San Pedro del Pinatar, Cartagena, Los Alcázares. About his dimensions, the most important is that it has 135 km2, 73 km of coast and an average depth of 4m. Its average temperature is 15º, being able to reach 30º in the hottest days of the summer. Now, I’m going to talk about its economic and ecological importance.

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Script of my speech (1)

Good evening (everyone). I'd like to start by introducing myself(. My) name is Carmen Marín. The subject of my presentation is the Mar Menor, (its) importance(,) and (its) recent environmental problems. Have you ever been there? When I was a child, parents always took their sons and (daughters) to this (beach), because of (its) warm and calm water(. It was a perfect place: safe and enjoyable.) Why am I speaking in (the) past (tense)? (That is because) the situation has changed radically. I have chosen to speak about this (topic) because I (am) from San Javier, next to the sea(. This) year’s media is (focused on) the contamination of the Mar Menor and (it) is a topic of habitual conversation in the (region).

I have divided my presentation into 4 parts. In the first part(,) I (will provide) brief information about (this) place(. In) the next section(,) I will explain the importance of the Mar Menor as a tourist point of the region and (its) biodiversity. In part three, I am going to show the causes and consequences that (have provoked) (its) current state. Finally, I (plan) to comment (on) the possible solutions that (have been) proposed to solve this environmental catastrophe. Now let us turn to point one.

(First) of all, I (am sure) that all of you (know) where Mar Menor (is) situated, but let me do a little presentation (either way). Mar Menor is in the southeast (part) of the region, and is surrounded by San Javier, San Pedro del Pinatar, Cartagena, (and) Los Alcázares. About (its) dimensions, (it is important to know) that it has (a surface area of) 135 km2, 73 km of coast(,) and an average depth of 4m. Its average temperature is 15º, being able to reach 30º in the hottest days of the summer. Now, I (am) going to talk about (Mar Menor's) economic and ecological importance.


Nice job on the first part of your speech! You mostly just had errors with run-on sentences, pronouns, and verbs. I was being picky with a lot of the other things.


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