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The mountain Long time ago I went on holidays to the mountains with my family, my husband and my sons. We have never been in Pyrenees before so we decided to stay at a campsite in order to go for a walk to a different ways every morning and to go sightseeing to a different village every afternoon. The place was absolutely marvelous, surrounded the flat place where the tent was there were enormous mountains which different colorful flowers, there were full of ancient trees and tiny birds. The white top of the mountains looks like a picture and the calm atmosphere makes me feel a delightful moment. The first morning we woke up very early, my husband helped the children to dress while I was cooking the breakfast. At least ready, with the slight backpack, we started the hiking. When we was walking along an uphill way I heard sound “We are near the stream” I wondered and Suddenly my husband shout at me: Stop!, be quiet! Don´t move! But it was late, a group of cyclist on a mountain bike came back to the village and they came incredibly fast. At that moment I remember I couldn’t see anything but I could hear the sound of the tires braking on the soil .They couldn’t stop and run over me. After a few seconds everything became absolutely silent and calm. I opened my eyes and I saw my husband sitting next to me. He explain me that I was at the intensive care unit at Hospital, I was in coma for a week. And the teenagers terrified cyclists “ They decided to be more careful next time”

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Hi there, here is the first part, the second part is coming up. I ran out of characters so I had to do it in two parts. I hope this helps, let me know if you have any questions with the corrections!

The mountain

A long time ago I went on holiday to the mountains with my family - my husband and my sons.  We have had never been in to the Pyrenees (always 'the' before mountain ranges)before, so we decided to stay at a campsite in order to go for a walk to so we could walk a different ways way every morning, and then to go sightseeing to in a different village every afternoon. The place was absolutely marvellous. Surrounding surrounded the flat place area where the tent was, there were enormous mountains which with different colourful flowers, there were full of ancient trees and tiny birds. The white top of the mountains looks looked (past tense)like a picture, and the calm atmosphere makes made me feel a delightful moment.
The first morning we woke up very early, my husband helped the children to dress get dressed while I was cooking cooked (when two things are happening at the same time you can use past simple or past continuous, but you must use the same tense for both actions)the breakfast. At least Finally we were ready, and with the slight light backpack, we started the hiking. When As we was were walking along an uphill way I heard a sound:  “We are near the stream”. I continued walking wondered and suddenly my husband shouted at to me: 'Stop!, be quiet! Don´t move!'
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But it was too late, a group of cyclists on a mountain bikes  were cycling came back to the village, and they came were going incredibly fast. At that moment I remember I couldn’t see anything, but I could hear the sound of the tires braking on the soil .They couldn’t stop, and they ran run over me. After a few seconds everything became absolutely silent and calm. I opened my eyes and I saw my husband sitting next to me. He explained to me that I was at in the intensive care unit at the hospital, I was had been (very important to use past perfect tense here, because the coma happened before your husband explained to you that you were in the intensive care unit)in a coma for a week. The terrified teenage cyclists said: “They We have decided to will be more careful next time” (not quite sure what you wanted to say at the end here, but I have rephrased it. I hope it matches what you wanted to say!)

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