Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing. Do you agree or disagree?
It's been written as a preporation for IELTS Writing part 2. Any feedback is welcomed and appreciated!
It is a controversial topic whether young people should be educated about healthy lifestyle and wellness or not. This essay agrees that children have to study the importance of looking after their health, the repercussions of the unhealthy ways of living and methods to improve their wellbeing. Firstly this essay will discuss the impact of the learning this subjects on their lives and secondly it will show why it is essential to conduct this education when children are young and more susceptible to any information they receive.
When children are taught about the aspects of healthy lifestyle such as the profilaxy of dangerous diseases, well-balanced diet and other measures to maintain wellness it will have a tremendous effect on their lives. Equipped with this knowledge they will take care of themselves from a very young age and therefore it is much more probably that they will have good health in their adult life and their longevity will improve, whereas without this knowledge they are likely to neglect their health. A recent research in the UK has proved this - people who had classes about health in middle school outperformed those who didn't - they had 20 % less chronic illnesses.
Another important point is that children should develop positive life skills instead of negative habits when they are young and suggestible. While children are young they can be taught healthy habits quite easily, however when they are adult it takes enormous efforts to rebuilt the way of living - change the diet, implement work out as a regular routine. In 1965 group of behavioral psychologists in the United States conducted the research which showed that the younger people are the faster reflexes are built.
In conclusion, this essay support the idea that schools ought to teach pupils subjects about how to be healthy, because it's impact on their lives can't be underestimated and the best way to know about well being is making them aware of it in the classroom. It's recommended to implement such subject in the middle school curriculum in order to ensure the longevity and wellness of teenagers.
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Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing. Do you agree or disagree?
It's been written as a preparation for IELTS Writing part 2. Any feedback is welcomed and appreciated!It is a controversial topic whether young people should be educated about healthy lifestyle and wellness or not. This essay agrees that children have to study the importance of looking after their health, as well as the repercussions of the unhealthy ways of living and methods to improve their wellbeing. Firstly, this essay will discuss the impact of the learning this subjects has on their lives, and secondly it will show why it is essential to conduct this education when children are young and more susceptible to any information they receive.
Being taught about the prevalence of dangerous diseases and how a well-balanced diet and healthy lifestyle can prevent them can have a tremendous effect on children's lives. Equipped with this knowledge they can take care of themselves from a very young age and therefore it is much more likely that they will have good health in their adult life and their longevity will improve. By contrast, without this knowledge they are likely to neglect their health. A recent research in the UK has proven this - people who had classes about health in middle school outperformed those who didn't - they had 20 % less chronic illnesses.
Another important point is that children should develop positive life skills instead of negative habits when they are young and suggestible. While children are young they can be taught healthy habits quite easily. However, when they are adults it takes an enormous effort to rethink their way of living - such as changing diet and working out regularly. In 1965, a group of behavioral psychologists in the United States conducted the research which showed that the younger people are the faster reflexes are built.
In conclusion, this essay support the idea that schools ought to teach pupils subjects about how to be healthy is correct because its impact on their lives cannot be underestimated. The best way to educate about well being is to make children aware of it in the classroom. Including this on the middle school curriculum can ensure the longevity and wellness of teenagers.
Very nicely written Mike. Have a think about the points highlighted in blue ('suggestible' has more of a negative meaning, and not sure about the sentence about reflexes). I've done some other restructuring which will be good for review, e.g. using "can" instead of "will" when talking about opportunities arising from change.
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