IELTS - Writing task 2 - Please help! =)
I'm preparing for the IETLS. I need band 6.5 and I'm not very confident with my writing skills. I'm happy for every advice you guys can give me.
TOPIC: Governments should spend more money on roads rather than railways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's world, some people claim that the current governments should invest much rather into roads than railways. This essay agrees with this statement and will support the argument by looking at the distribution of modern infrastructure and the way people are optimising their needs regarding transportation.
During the last century, the era of public transportation by train peaked in the middle of the industrial revolution, but since then, a clear downward trend is noticeable. Because of the easy availability of cars, which are used for short-range and mid-range destinations, it is obvious, that cheap flights take the bigger share of the long distance destinations sector compared to trains and cars. For example, flights are faster than train rides, but a flight from Berlin to London is usually about 20€. On the other hand, overcoming the same distance by using the train would be about 150€.
Another point is that people, who try to fulfil their daily needs, much rather rely on cars, to be flexible and optimise their time management. The average citizen's life is not the same as maybe 70 years ago, because time schedules became looser and people enjoy a more individual life. To not be depended on the fixed schedules, the public transportation sector offers, people much rather use their cars, which makes a more developed system of roads more important than improved railways. For example, more and more employers offer flexible work times and are adapting to modern needs. This is directly related towards the use of cars and trains.
In conclusion, to fulfil the needs of average citizens and compared to cheaper alternatives of the transportation by trains, the governments should indeed invest into roads rather than railways. The trend goes towards the direction of flexibility and individualism, so the utility of trains is limited and not worth to get extented.
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IELTS - Writing task 2 - Please help! =)
I'm preparing for the IETLS. I need to achieve the band of 6.5 and I'm not very confident with my writing skills. I'm happy for any advice you guys can give me.TOPIC: Governments should spend more money on roads rather than railways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's world, some people claim that current governments should invest more into roads than railways. This essay agrees with the statement and will support the argument by looking at the distribution of modern infrastructure and the way people are optimising their transportation needs.
The popularity of train travel peaked in the middle of the industrial revolution, but since then, a clear downward trend is noticeable. Due to the availability of cars, which are used for short-range and mid-range destinations, cheap flights take the bigger share of the long distance destinations sector when compared to trains and cars. For example, flights are faster than trains, but a flight from Berlin to London is usually about 20€. On the other hand, travelling the same distance by train would cost about 150€.
In addition, people will more regularly fulfil their daily needs by relying on cars, in order to be flexible and reduce the time taken to travel. The average person's life is not the same as it would have been 70 years ago, because time schedules are now less restricted and people enjoy a more individual life. To prevent having to depend on the fixed schedules given by public transport, people will more often use their cars, which makes a more developed system of roads more important than improved railways. For example, more employers offer flexible work times and are adapting to modern needs. This is directly influenced by the use of cars and trains.
In conclusion, to fulfil the needs of average people, compared to cheaper alternatives of the transportation by trains, the governments should indeed invest into roads rather than railways. The trend correlates to the direction of flexibility and individualism, so the utility of trains is limited and not likely to be grown.
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IELTS - Writing task 2 - Please help! =)
I'm preparing for the IETLS. I need band 6.5 and I'm not very confident with my writing skills. I'm happy for every advice you guys can give me.TOPIC: Governments should spend more money on roads rather than railways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's world,Recently， some people have proposed that the current governments should invest much rather into roads than railways. This essay I agrees with this statement and will support the argument by looking at the distribution of modern infrastructure and the way people are optimising optimize their needs regarding transportation.
During the last century, the era of public transportation by train peaked in the middle of the industrial revolution, but since then, however, was followed by a clear downward trend is noticeable. Because of the easy availability of cars, which are used for short-range and mid-range destinations, it is obvious, that cheap flights take the bigger share of the long distance destinations trips sector compared to trains and cars. For example, flights are faster than train rides, but a flight from Berlin to London is usually about 20€. On the other hand, overcoming the same distance by using the train would be about 150€. (babe, if you want to support cars, why use an example of planes?)
Another point is that people, who want to fulfil their daily needs, much rather rely on automobiles which are flexible and can optimise optimize their time management. The life of citizens is not the same as that in maybe 70 years ago with personalized time schedules a more individual life(babe, I am not sure what you want to say here). To not be depended on the fixed schedules, the public transportation sector offers (??? offers what), people much rather use their cars, which makes a more developed system of roads more important than improved railways. For example, more and more employers offer flexible work times and are adapting to modern needs. This is directly related towards the use of cars and trains.(babe, I am completely lost...) Nowadays, our life is not the same as that 70 years ago. With improved life standard, more people can afford cars.The expanding automobile market also offers us more options of choosing personalized cars. Cars, which fit our diverse time schedules, become more accessible. When it comes to daily life, the need for cars overcomes that for trains. Therefore, government should make more investment in roads, which builds a better condition for driving cars. (How about this? Just a suggestion:))
In conclusion, to fulfil the needs of average citizens and compared to cheaper alternatives of the transportation by trains(this should be elaborated in the first point), the governments should indeed invest into roads rather than railways. The trend goes towards the direction of flexibility and individualism, so the utility of trains is limited and not worth to get extented.
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