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Daily writing practice 17th, November Please correct as follows if it's wrong. thank you! ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- While some people may believe that air pollution is almost made by trash. It is far more realistic for us is that cars cause primarily air pollution. There are two important reasons which are producing harmful emission and depletion natural resources. The first reason why autos are mostly responsible for air pollution is that they give off a number of badly effect gas and any of this gas can pose people harmful impacts. For example, cars produce carbon monoxide, is a odorless and colorless gas which can kill a person in a room. According to new research, it suggests that a person who lives in big city is chiefly affected by carbon monoxide. It found that it contributes to cause people cancer by higher rates and that also can make you more likely to suffer from insomnia or depression. Moreover, carbon dioxide are also released by cars. We know that is mainly responsible for much of air pollution that is changing the earth’s climate. Thus, although cars have been a useful invention, their benefits are outweighed by harmful emission.

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Daily writing practice 17th, November

Please correct as follows if it's wrong. thank you!
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While some people may believe that air pollution is almost mostly made by trash*, it is far more realistic for us is likely / probable that cars cause primarily cause air pollution. Indeed**, there are two important reasons which why cars are responsible for producing harmful emissions, and for depletion depleting / the depletion of natural resources.


The first reason why autos are mostly responsible for air pollution is that they give off a number of badly effect gases, and any of this gas some of which can pose people harmful impacts cause people harm. For example, cars produce carbon monoxide, is a  an odorless and colorless gas which can kill a person (when left to build up) in a room. Indeed, According to new research, it suggests new research suggests that a person who lives in big city is chiefly affected by carbon monoxide***. It Research has also found that it carbon monoxide contributes to cause people cancer by higher rates higher rates of cancer in humans, and that also can it can also make you^ more likely to suffer from insomnia or depression. Moreover, carbon dioxide are also released by cars^^ We know that carbon monoxide is mainly responsible for much of the air pollution that is changing the earth’s climate.

(Is there a second reason why cars are responsible for causing air pollution? There appears to be only one reason given here.)

Thus, although cars have been a useful invention, their benefits are outweighed by harmful emissions.

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Great effort overall! I've given some additional comments here below. In general though, I'd suggest paying attention to word order, and trying to avoid the repetition of phrases and ideas. *'Trash' is US English. While not wrong, it does sound a bit informal to me for this essay. I'd probably use 'rubbish' or 'landfill' here instead ** This word connects the two sentences together in a stronger way *** Again, while this isn't wrong, I might say 'Indeed, new research suggests that a person who lives in a big city has a high risk of being negatively / seriously affected by carbon monoxide'. Well done for using 'affected' instead of 'effected' though - that's a common mistake even natives make! ^While 'you' isn't wrong, it looks like you're writing an essay. In English, we avoid using words like 'you' in essays. I'd use 'people' here instead ^^ I deleted this because you have already made this point in your essay - no need to repeat it

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