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Essay (I'm practicing for FCE) Correct my mistakes, please!!! Keeping animals in zoos is cruel. Although we love looking at animals and knowing about their behaviour, we could think that seeing them throw bars or heavy glass boxes it's not a good action. They are bounded. This is our main reason to demand for the clousure of zoos. Animals are there correctely treated and feeded, however their space is minor than they can use in their natural environment. Besides, in some cases they are trained to aquatic shows, as Barcelona zoo's dolphins. Furthermore, some zoos were accused of killing health animals to control over population. On the other hand, social media generation do not need going to any zoo to knowabout the wild life of animals. Children have widely internet access, where they can learn a lot about conservation and ecologic behaviour. I find it more educative than taking a selfie with an elephant. In conclusion, I strongly believe that today is not necesary to have zoos in our cities. We can close down them following the exampleof cities like Buenos Aires, and promove an ecologic and emphatetic feeling in children and society.

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Essay (I'm practicing for FCE)

Correct my mistakes, please!!!

Keeping animals in zoos is cruel.

Although we love looking at animals and knowing about their behaviour, we should also think that seeing them throw bars or heavy glass boxes is not nice. They are tied up. This is our main reason for demanding the closure of zoos.

Animals are often treated and fell well there. However their space is less than they have in their natural environment. Besides, in some cases they are trained to do aquatic shows, such as Barcelona zoo's dolphins. Furthermore, some zoos have been accused of killing healthy animals to control over-population.

On the other hand, the social media generation does not need to go to any zoo to know about the wild life of animals. Children widely have internet access, where they can learn a lot about conservation and ecologic behaviour. I find it more educational than taking a selfie with an elephant.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that today it is not necessary to have zoos in our cities. We can close them down following the example of cities like Buenos Aires, and promote an ecologic and empathetic feeling in children and society.
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Essay (I'm practicing for FCE)

Correct my mistakes, please!!!

Keeping animals in zoos is cruel.

Although we love looking at animals and knowing about their behaviour*, we should realize that seeing them through bars or heavy glass windows is not a good idea. They are restricted. This is our main reason for demanding the closure of zoos.

 The animals are there treated correctly and fed well, however, their space is much less than they can use  have  in their natural environment. Besides this, in some cases they are trained to perform in aquatic shows, as the Barcelona zoo's dolphins. Furthermore, some zoos were accused of killing healthy animals to control over population.

On the other hand, with the present social media generation we do not need to go to any zoo to know about the wild life of animals. Children have wide internet access, where they can learn a lot about conservation and ecologic behaviour. I find it more educational than taking a selfie with an elephant.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that today is not necessary to have zoos in our cities. We can close them down and following the example of cities like Buenos Aires, and promote an ecologic and emphatic feeling in children and society.

* behaviour = UK spelling

 behavior = E.E.U.U. spelling

Very good piece of writing. Well done.

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