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A little mistake I work in the help desk department. I am responsible to find solution and explain them to help clients resolve their problems. It make me nervous and stressed every day because it is hard work for me that I handle it difficultly. At this afternoon, it was the time to have lunch, but we had to log out from system before out for lunch. Unfortunately, I forgot to log out my account from system, so I got punished from my boss. I was sad a whole afternoon and promised to my boss I won't make it again. I thank it is a good experience for me because it made me more careful to handle my work.

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A little mistake

I work in the help desk department. I am responsible for finding solutions and explaining them to help clients resolve their problems. It makes me nervous and stressed every day because it is such hard work for me that I handle it with difficulty. This afternoon, it was time to have lunch, but we had to log out from system before going out for lunch. Unfortunately, I forgot to log out of my account from the system, so I got punished by my boss. I was sad the whole afternoon and promised my boss I won't do it again. I think it is a good experience for me because it made me more careful about  handling my work.


Hello Harus,

At least no one did anything bad on the system under your name. I can understand why your boss was unhappy but it sounds like you have learned your lesson.

Just a few small corrections, the collocation is 'responsible for + verb-ing /noun.

Best wishes

Bob

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A little mistake

I work in the help desk [or "helpdesk"] department. I am responsible to find for finding solutions and explaining them to help clients resolve their problems. It make me nervous and stressed every day because it is hard work and I find it really challenging [maybe?] for me that I handle it difficultly. At This afternoon at lunchtime it was the time to have lunch, but we had to log out from our [computer?] system before out for leaving for lunch. Unfortunately, I forgot to log out from my account from system so I got punished from by my boss. I was sad a throughout the whole afternoon and promised to my boss I won't wouldn't make it the same mistake again.  Overall though* I thank think it is was a good experience for me because it has made me think more carefully about how to handle my work.

 

* I think you need something here like 'Overall though' or 'Upon reflection' or 'Having said that' because you are switching from a negative feeling sentence to a sentence with a positive feeling.  You need a phrase like this to make the sentences sound more natural together.

 Good luck in your job! 

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A little mistake

I work in the help desk department. I am responsible for finding solutions and explaining them to help clients resolve their problems. It makes me nervous and stressed every day because it is hard work for me and I handle it with difficulty. At This afternoon, it was the time to have lunch, but we had to log out of the system before going out for lunch. Unfortunately, I forgot to log out of my account in the system, so my boss punished me. I was sad for the whole afternoon and promised to my boss that I wouldn't do it again. I think it is a good experience for me because it made me more careful with handling my work.

Good work!!

Note - if you use "this" you don't need to use at/in/on ie. "This year, I'm going to...." "This summer, I want to..." "I ate breakfast this morning."

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