Writing Paper Part 2 (CAE). Task Type: Review
I would appreciate corrections on both grammar and form. I'm not sure how to write a good review and werther I was off track or not...
Question
You have seen the following announcement in your local arts magazine:
PERFORMANCE OF THE YEAR
What has been the best performance this year in your local area? It could be a concert or a stage play, or perhaps an art or craft exhibition. You can make your nomination by sending us a review of what you have seen, telling us why you think it was the most outstanding performance of the year...
Write the review. (Around 220-260 words).
I rememeber the first time I got ice cream as a child. After eating my watermelon cone I felt blissed and ready for bis. I got the exact same feeling exiting the theater that hosted the Lançamento Jazz e Blues Festival in Bari yesterday night.
Ten veteran artists played in a beautiful succession, provinding two hours of pure entertainment and enchanting atmosphere.
Before going through the details of the astounding performance, some background is needed: the group is all composed by Brazilian drifters, who share a true passion for either Blues or Jazz, with both genres being born in the United states between the 19th and 20th century. According to the pamphlet we were given in the auditorium, some of the members were recruited from the streets of Rio de Janeiro and Sao Paolo, where they played dayily before becoming a part of this talented musical body.
Clariano Soares and his crew delighted the audience alternating rythmical and fast-paced tunes with slow and emotional themes, causing some tear-jerking moments and overall making every cent spent on the quite expensive ticket count.
Indeed, the price of the ticket, along with the lack of popularity of these genres in our area, may be the main reason why the theatre was not sold out.
Nevertheless, after yesterday’s performance a lady here can only hope for more people to get close to the genres and that next time the event will obtain both the numbers and enthusiasm that it certainly deserves.
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Writing Paper Part 2 (CAE). Task Type: Review
I would appreciate corrections on both grammar and form. I'm not sure how to write a good review and whether I was off track or not...Question
You have seen the following announcement in your local arts magazine:
PERFORMANCE OF THE YEAR
What has been the best performance this year in your local area? It could be a concert or a stage play, or perhaps an art or craft exhibition. You can make your nomination by sending us a review of what you have seen, telling us why you think it was the most outstanding performance of the year...
Write the review. (Around 220-260 words).
I remember the first time I got ice cream as a child. After eating my watermelon cone, I felt blessed and ready for business.
I got the exact same feeling exiting the theatre that hosted the Lançamento Jazz and Blues Festival in Bari yesterday night.
Ten veteran artists played in a beautiful succession providing two hours of pure entertainment and enchanting atmosphere.
Before going through the details of the astounding performance, some background is needed: the group is all composed by Brazilian drifters who share a true passion for either Blues or Jazz. Both genres being born in the United states between the 19th and 20th century. According to the pamphlet we were given in the auditorium, some of the members were recruited from the streets of Rio de Janeiro and Sao Paolo where they played daily, before becoming a part of this talented musical body.
Clariano Soares and his crew delighted the audience. They alternated between rhythmical and fast-paced tunes with slow and emotional themes. Causing some extreme tear-jerking moments. For those who attended, every cent spent on the quite expensive ticket counted.
Although, as the price of the ticket along with the lack of popularity of these genres in our area, may have accounted to why the theatre was not sold out.
With the results of yesterday’s performance, a lady here can only hope for more people to get close to the genres. Hopefully, next time the event will obtain both the numbers and enthusiasm that it certainly deserves.
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Writing Paper Part 2 (CAE). Task Type: Review
I would appreciate corrections on both grammar and form. I'm not sure how to write a good review or whether I was off track or not...Question
You have seen the following announcement in your local arts magazine:
PERFORMANCE OF THE YEAR
What has been the best performance this year in your local area? It could be a concert or a stage play, or perhaps an art or craft exhibition. You can make your nomination by sending us a review of what you have seen, telling us why you think it was the most outstanding performance of the year...
Write the review. (Around 220-260 words).
I remember the first time I got ice cream as a child. After eating my watermelon cone I felt blissful and ready for biscuits. I got the exact same feeling exiting the theater that hosted the Lançamento Jazz e Blues Festival in Bari yesterday night.
Ten veteran artists played in a beautiful succession, providing two hours of pure entertainment and enchanting atmosphere.
Before going through the details of this astounding performance, some background is needed: the group is all composed of Brazilian drifters, who share a true passion for either Blues or Jazz, with both genres being born in the United states between the 19th and 20th century. According to the pamphlet we were given in the auditorium, some of the members were recruited from the streets of Rio de Janeiro and Sao Paolo, where they played daily before becoming a part of this talented musical body.
Clariano Soares and his crew delighted the audience alternating rythmical and fast-paced tunes with slow and emotional themes, causing some tear-jerking moments and overall making every cent spent on the quite expensive ticket count.
Indeed, the price of the ticket, along with the lack of popularity of these genres in our area, may be the main reason why the theatre was not sold out.
Nevertheless, after yesterday’s performance a lady here can only hope for more people to get close to the genres and that next time the event will obtain both the numbers and enthusiasm that it certainly deserves.
Very well written!
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Writing Paper Part 2 (CAE). Task Type: Review
I would appreciate corrections on both grammar and form. I'm not sure how to write a good review and whether I was off track or not...Question
You have seen the following announcement in your local arts magazine:
PERFORMANCE OF THE YEAR
What has been the best performance this year in your local area? It could be a concert or a stage play, or perhaps an art or craft exhibition. You can make your nomination by sending us a review of what you have seen, telling us why you think it was the most outstanding performance of the year...
Write the review. (Around 220-260 words).
I remember the first time I ate ice cream as a child. After eating my watermelon cone I felt blissed and ready for bis. I got the exact same feeling exiting the theater that hosted the Lançamento Jazz e Blues Festival in Bari yesterday night.
Ten veteran artists played in beautiful succession, providing two hours of pure entertainment and an enchanting atmosphere.
Before going through the details of the astounding performance, some background is needed: the group is composed of Brazilian drifters, who share a true passion for either Blues or Jazz, both genres being born in the United states between the 19th and 20th century. According to the pamphlet we were given in the auditorium, some of the members were recruited from the streets of Rio de Janeiro and Sao Paolo, where they played daily before becoming a part of this talented musical body.
Clariano Soares and his crew delighted the audience alternating rythmical and fast-paced tunes with slow and emotional themes, causing some tear-jerking moments and overall making every cent spent on the quite expensive ticket count.
Indeed, the price of the ticket, along with the lack of popularity of these genres in our area, may be the main reason why the theatre was not sold out.
Nevertheless, after yesterday’s performance a lady here can only hope for more people to get close to the genres and that next time the event will obtain both the numbers and enthusiasm that it certainly deserves.
You wrote very well. I could feel your enthusiasm while I was reading. Well done! I hope you get good marks for this! ;)
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