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Halloween I have a memory with my best friend some years ago. We have a nice relationship from high school. I'm a girl and he's a boy. We grew up day by day beside each other. And we had never thought that someday, our relationship could be change. Everything change from when we graduated from high shool, we wanted to beside continued, so we choosed the same universty. Unfortuanable, I fell, he passed. So we had to go 2 diffirent university. I hoped that everything could be the same. But no! It's impossible. I saw he change. He liked to go with his friend, always busy to answer my message, did't call to me usually. But i feel i miss him more. With pride of a girl, i didn't tell him. But someday, in midnight, he called me and he said he miss me so much. And he too tired of everything. He didn't want to live in that way, just want to come back in simple live, always smile like before, with me. I thought that: why not? Why we can't not be a couple. We are best friend. We always miss each other. We can not find anyone the same. So, why not? We had a date on Halloween( in a year i can not remember). Hand in hand and smiled all night. We stoped in front of a lake, sit down and talked a lot. Seem like everything stoped, time, space, eveybodys...Then when we said good bye, without a kiss, without any promise, but i was very happy. And i hope he were the same. Some days after, i sent a lot of messages, but he didn't answer. I was worry. And felt sad. Because i'm a sensitive girl, so i was very sad when i sent a lot of messages with no answer. I didn't call him. Just waited. Some day later, he sent to me a message , he said he was in hospital, he had a sick. He had stay at hospital for 2 weeks. And he had time to think twice. He just want to be friend with me. He said something more. But i didn't care. Don't want to remember. Have some tears droped to my face. Have something broken in my heart. After that, it was take a long time, we still be friend. And I have never forgot the Hallowen.

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Halloween

I have a memory of my best friend some years ago.
We had a nice relationship from high school. I'm a girl and he's a boy. We grew up day by day beside each other. And we never thought that someday our relationship might change.
Everything changed when we graduated from high school. We wanted to stay together so we chose the same university. Unfortunately, I failed and he passed, so we had to go to different universities. I hoped that everything could be the same but no, it was impossible.
I saw him change. He liked to go with his friends, was always too busy to answer my messages, didn't often call me. But I missed him more. With the pride of a girl, I didn't tell him. But one day at midnight, he called me and he said he missed me so much. And he was too tired of everything. He didn't want to live that way, just wanted to come back to a simple life, always smiling like before with me.
I thought why not? Why shouldn't we be a couple. We are best friends. We always miss each other. We cannot find anyone the same. So, why not?
We had a date on Halloween (in a year I cannot remember). Hand in hand we smiled all night. We stopped in front of a lake, sat down and talked a lot. It seemed like everything stopped; time, space, everybody...Then when we said good bye, without a kiss, without any promise, but I was very happy. And I hope he was, too.
Some days after, i sent a lot of messages, but he didn't answer. I was worried and felt sad. Because i'm a sensitive girl, I was very sad when i sent a lot of messages with no answer. I didn't call him further and just waited.
Some days later, he sent me a message. He said he was in hospital and that he was sick. He had to stay there for 2 weeks. And he had time to think twice. He just wanted to be friend with me. He said something more. But i didn't care. I don't want to remember. Some tears dropped onto my face. Something broke in my heart. After that, it took a long time and we still are friends.
And I have never forgotten that Halloween.

Very well written!

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Halloween

I have a memory of my best friend from some years ago.
We had a nice relationship in high school. I'm a girl and he's a boy. We grew up with each other. And we had never thought that someday, our relationship could be change.
Everything changed from when we graduated from high school. We wanted to stay near each other, so we chose the same universty. Unfortunately, I was not accepted, and he was, and we had to go 2 diffirent universities. I hoped that everything would remain the same. But no! It was impossible.
I watched him change. He liked to go out with his friends, was always too busy to answer my messages, didn't often call. But I felt I missed him more and more. Because of my girlish pride, I didn't tell him/let him know. But one day, at midnight, he called me and he said he missed me a lot. And he was too tired of everything. He didn't want to live in that way, he just wanted to return to a simple life, always smiling like before, with me.
I thought that: why not? Why can't we be a couple? We are best friends. We always miss each other. We can not find anyone who's the same. So, why not?
We had a date on Halloween(I can't remember the year). We walked hand in hand, and smiled all night. We stopped in front of a lake, sat down and talked a lot/for a while. It seemed like everything had stopped, time, space, everybody/the whole world...Then when we said good bye, without a kiss, without any promise, but I was very happy. And I hoped he felt the same.

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Some days after, I sent him a lot of messages, but he didn't answer. I was worried, and I felt sad. I'm a sensitive girl. [so i was very sad when i sent a lot of messages with no answer]. I didn't call him. Just waited. 
Some day later, he sent to me a message. He said he was in the hospital, he was sick. He had to stay at the hospital for 2 weeks. And he had had time to think twice. He just wanted to be friends with me. He said something else, too. But I didn't care. I don't want to remember now. Some tears have dropped down my face/run down my cheeks. I have something broken in my heart. A long time after, we are still friends.
And I have never forgotten that Hallowen.


You tell the story so beautifully, and your English is very good. Let me know if you have any questions about the corrections.

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Hukun, I'm not sure that i can understand what you mean. Maybe because i not really good at English. It's just a memory in the pass. And now everything is ok. I hope can see your comment on my next entry! I a little curious about your cheracter! Haha
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All right, Seriously you are a kind of like need to let go more than let be, you know what i'm saying?

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