Hi guys! Can you correct my writing please:)
We live in the World where everyone tries to earn a lot of money. Some people think that only wealthy people are successful. I disagree with this point of vie. It is possible to be a person successful without earning huge amount of money. I have great examples to prove it.
The first reason is, when you love you job you are successful. You can hear a lot of stories about people who make more money, but it is a fact that most of them do not like their job. In other hand you can have job that you love, make less money but still be successful. In my experience, I had a job in an accounting and I was successful. But I hated to woke up everyday and went place that I hate. Finally, I changed my job and now I am earning less money but I am satisfied and successful at this field.
The second reason is, successful people at job most of the time unhappy in their private life. Nowadays a job takes huge amount of time. You can not moderate your work time and family time. In my opinion success at family it is more important. Family include people who care about you, support and make you life better and complete. For example, If you spent all the time at job and do not care about family, finally family can leave you. If it will happen, you can not continue work anymore because you do not have people who inspire you.
In conclusion, success is not depends on how much money you get. It depends on how do you love a job that you do and how you happy in your private life.
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Hi guys! Can you correct my writing please:)
We live in the a World where everyone tries to earn a lot of money. Some people think that only wealthy people are successful. I disagree with this point of view. It is possible to be a successful person successful without earning huge amounts of money. I have great examples to prove it.The first reason is, when you love your job you are successful. You can hear a lot of stories about people who make more money, but it is a fact that most of them do not like their job. In On the other hand you can have a job that you love, make less money but still be successful. In my experience, I had a job in an accounting and I was successful. But I hated to woke waking up everyday and went going to a place that I hate. Finally, I changed my job and now I am earning less money but I am satisfied and successful at in this field.
The second reason is, people who are successful at their job, are unhappy in their private life most of the time. successful people at job most of the time unhappy in their private life. Nowadays a job takes huge amount of time. You can not moderate your work time and family time. In my opinion success at with your family it is more important. Family includes people who care about you, support you, and make your life better and complete. For example, if you spent all the your time at your job and do did not care about family, finally family can your family might eventually leave you. If it that will happens, you can not continue to work anymore because you do not have people who inspire you.
In conclusion, success is does not depends on how much money you get. It depends on how do much you love a the job that you do and how you happy happy you are in your private life.
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Hi guys! Can you correct my writing please:)
We live in a worldSome people think that only wealthy people are successful. >Some people think that you/we have to be wealthy to be successful.
I disagree with this point of view, because It is possible to be a person successful person without having to earn earning huge amount of money. I have great examples to prove it.
The first reason is that, when you love you job, you are successful.> The first reason is that you/we are already successful if you/we love your /our job. ( I prefer to use "we" because it is most inclusive-- meaning for everyone).
You We can hear a lot of stories about people who are making a lot of more money, but it is a fact that most of them do not like their jobs. In On the other hand, we can have a job that we love, making less money, but and still be successful. I say this from In my own experience, for I once had a high-paying job in an accounting firm and was successful, but I hated it. I had to wake up very early everyday, and I had to go to places that I hated. Finally, I changed my job and now I am earning less money now, but I am satisfied and successful in at this my new career/ field of work.
The second reason is, successful people at job most of the time unhappy in their private life. x> The second reason is that successful people who earn a lot from their work are actually unhappy with their private life most of the time.
Nowadays, any high-paying job will usually demand takes a huge amount of time to be spent on the job. You can not balance moderate your work the time you spend working with the time you should spend with your and family. time. In my opinion, success at happiness at home is more important, because our family includes people who care about you, who support you and who will make your life better happier and complete. For example, if you spend all your the time at work job and do not care about your family, your finally family can may eventually want to leave you. If that happens, it will happen, you will can not be able to concentrate continue on your work anymore, because you will do then have nobody around you who can inspire you.
In conclusion, success does is not depend on how much money you have get. It depends on how much do you love a the job (that) you are doing and how you happy you are in your private life.
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Да, это так :)
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