Lucky, the rabbit. (Please, correct)
Please, correct if you find any weird or unnatural phrasing. Thanks!
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Meet Lucky the rabbit! Like all the children in the morning he diligently makes his bed and does morning exercises. Morning exercises are very good for your body! (In my opinion too many morinings here, any way to avoid?)
Lucky loved sweets! Especially candies. He didn't know that it was harmful for his teeth to eat a lot of sweet things.
Lucky loved sweets so much he couldn't help without them even when he went for a walk. He had tons of sweets in his pocket.
Because Lucky ate so many sweets but rarely brushed teeth, germs made them their home. But worry not, a toothpaste can drive them away!
Now Lucky knows how to get rid of germs! He eats much less candies now.
Lucky started to eat a lot of vegetables and his teeth stopped aching! All thanks to eating healty food like cabbages, carrots and berries rather than candies and cakes!
Lucky takes care about his teeth! And he can teach you too! Watch this animation, Lucky will explain how to properly brush your teeth!
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Lucky, the Rabbit. (Please, correct)
Please, correct if you find any weird or unnatural phrasing. Thanks!---------------------
Meet Lucky the rabbit! Like all the [1] children in the morning, he diligently makes his bed and does morning exercises. Morning exercises are very good for your body! (In my opinion too many mornings here, any way to avoid?) [You could say, "Daily exercises are very good...."]
Lucky loves sweets! Especially candy [2]. Previously, he didn't know that it was bad for his teeth to eat a lot of sweet things.
Lucky loved sweets so much he carried some even when he went for a walk. He had tons of sweets in his pocket.
Because Lucky ate so many sweets, but rarely brushed teeth, germs made them their home. But worry not, [3] a toothpaste can drive them away!
Now Lucky knows how to get rid of germs! He eats much less candy now.
Lucky started to eat a lot of vegetables, and his teeth stopped aching! All thanks to eating healthy food like cabbage, [4] carrots, and berries instead of/rather than candy and cake! [4]
Lucky takes care of his teeth! And he can teach you too! Watch this animation, Lucky will explain how to properly brush your teeth!
[1] The definite article "the" would be used only if you were referring to a specific group of children.
[2] The singular form "candy" is usually used. However, "candies" is not wrong."
[3] In typical English, you would say, "But don't worry." However, your phrase "But worry not" sounds great!
[4] For these foods, use the plural form when you want to specify the number of them. "I love cabbage and cake, so I bought two cabbages, and three cakes."
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