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please correct my essay! Which Is the Worst Sport for Children to Play? Many people are attracted to charms of skateboarding. Especially a part of young people like skateboarding clothing. It is true that the people who enjoy it say that they feel breeze in whole body in playing it, while lots of people complain to skateboarding people. So, I will introduce that skateboarding has negative influence to everyone in terms of shock absorption, difficulty to manipulate, and ground condition. To begin with, when people skateboarding, it produces uncomfortable and noisy sound. Most of skateboard’s whiles are made by plastics, so there is no shock-absorbing material. It means that impact from a ground leads to whiles directly. Moreover, because of the lack of shock absorption, it is dangerous when a road is uneven. When you ride on a bike, it is not so important problem because rubber ease the impulse from ground, yet as for skateboarding, that is not going to happen. The more the road is rough, the more difficult to play skateboarding. Due to lack of shock absorption, some problems have happened. Secondly, it is very difficult to manipulate a skateboard. If you don’t put on protector and slip, you might hit your head, break a bone, or injure your body. Not only that, you might attack to other people in falling or when you can’t stop. If you cause an accident, in addition to hurt other person, perhaps you have to pay a huge amount of money. And if can drive zig zag, you will feel comfortable. On the other hand, people around you feel uncomfortable and may be irritated. Last but not least, skateboarding will make the ground rough. When you play it on a concrete ground, the ground is not scratched. However, dirt is much easier to be rough because compare to concrete, dirt is very soft. As well as dirt, skateboarding will damage plants in playing a park or dirt road. Skateboarders ought not to forget that when plants and dirt are damaged, municipalities spend tax to repair these things. By the way, due to such people who don’t have good public manners, more and more parks forbid to play skateboarding. As long as skateboarders play in safe areas with protectors, it is not so dangerous sports. Yet they have to remember that it has a negative points and a risk of bothering other people. When you do somewhere, you should use a bicycle, a car, or other transportations.

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please correct my essay!

Which Is the Worst Sport for Children to Play?

Many people are attracted to the charms of skateboarding. Some young people, especially, like skateboarding clothes. It is true that those who enjoy it say that they feel the breeze over their whole body in playing it. There are others, though, who complain about skateboarders. So, I will suggest that shocks due to  skateboarding always do harm and are difficult to control, depending on ground conditions.

To begin with, when people skateboard, they make an uncomfortable and noisy sound. Mostly skateboard wheels are plastic, a rigid material, with no shock-absorption. It means that an impact from transfers directly to the wheels. Moreover, because of the lack of shock absorption, it is dangerous when a road is uneven. When you ride on a bike, it is not so important because rubber eases the impulse from ground, but for skateboarding that is not going to happen. The more the road is rough, the more difficult to skateboard. Due to this lack of shock absorption, some problems have happened.

Secondly, it is very difficult to control a skateboard. If you don’t put on protector and slip, you might hit your head, break a bone, or injure your body. Not only that, you might hurt others in falling or when you can’t stop. If you cause an accident, hurting another person, perhaps you will have to pay a huge amount of money. And if you can drive zig zag, you will feel comfortable.(??) On the other hand, people around you feel dizzy(??) and may be irritated.

Last but not least, skateboarding will make the ground rough. When you skate on concrete the ground is not scratched. However, dirt is much easier to be roughened because compared to concrete, dirt is very soft. As well as dirt, skateboarding will damage plants in playing in the park or on a dirt road. Skateboarders ought not to forget that when plants and dirt are damaged, municipalities must spend taxes to repair these things. By the way, due to such impolite people, more and more parks forbid skateboarding.

As long as skateboarders play in safe areas with protectors, it is not so dangerous. Yet they have to remember that it has some negative points and risks bothering others. When you go somewhere, you should use a bicycle, a car, or other means of transport.(??)

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please correct my essay!

Which Is the Worst Sport for Children to Play?

Many people are attracted to the charms of skateboarding. Some Especially a part of young people especially like skateboarding clothing. It is true that the pPeople who enjoy it say that they love to feel the breeze on the in whole body while skateboarding [one doesn't play skateboarding like one plays football], while lots of people complain about to skateboarders ing people [to is accurate if you mean that people stop skateboards and then complain to them].

So, I will introduce the concept that skateboarding has negative influences to everyone in terms of shock absorption, difficulty to manipulate, and ground condition.


To begin with, when people skateboarding, it produces an uncomfortable and noisy sound. Most of a skateboard’s wheels whiles are made by plastics, so there is no shock-absorbing material. It means that the impact from a ground leads directly impacts the wheels to whiles directly. Moreover, because of the lack of shock absorption, it is dangerous when a surface road is uneven. When you ride on a bike, it is not a so important problem because the rubber ease the impactulse from the ground, yet as for skateboarding, that is not going to happen. The more the road is rough, the more difficult to play skateboarding is. Due to lack of shock absorption, some accidents problems have happened.

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