Some thoughts about /Breaking Bad/

1/ When you "see" something, your eyes notice it. But if you go on looking at it for a long time (as you do with a TV show) then you are watching it. 2/ The role is what an actor plays, but here you are talking not about the role, but rather the character.

He made use of a child, killed people one by one, lied to his best partern partner (alternatively, "best friend"; I'm guessing that you're talking about Jesse here), and he felt nothing when innocent people died even if that person was he's a child.

You have established that "he" refers to Walt. In this case you're talking about a child dying, so you would not use "he" but make it clear that it's another person. Otherwise it sounds like Walt is the one who died.

And he can't control himself; you can see it when he burned his new car and killed Mike.

A semi-colon is better than a comma when separating two clauses in a sentence. People's names need to be capitalised in English.

But what's ridiculous is that he wants to control everything (alternatively you could say "wants control of everything"); his wife, his partern partner, his lawer lawyer, his business.

Normally you would put an "and" before the last item in a list, but doing it the way you have here is accepted as a normal, if creative way of writing. It makes the point that there is a list of things that he wants to control more effectively than conventional writing, and suggests to the reader that the list may even go beyond that and does not end.

At the beginning he was only a chemistry teacher. I know people change eazily easily when they come face to face with desire. (This is just one way of putting it; I could have rewritten this in a number of ways. But you would not say "face to desire".) But Jesse‘s mind has been in the struggle struggling since he killed a man.

When you use "the" before a noun you need to have specified exactly which noun you refer to. In this case it wasn't a specific struggle, but Jessie's mind was struggling more generally. You therefore can't use "the".

Finally he decided that he was out of the business and gave up his money, calling it he called it black money.

It's best to make it clear what, exactly, he was "out" of. Also "he called it" was awkward here. Sorry, but I'm out of space to correct the rest.