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My Grammar and writing course homework on Oct.13/2016 Required: Use six special verbs to make a paragraph, talk about an accident or disaster, those verbs MUST use passive voice: destroy, injure, damage, kill, break, disrupt. Daphne (Ting Wang) 103GW Lana.K Oct.13/2016 Hurricane Matthew The hurricane Matthew has been striking Haiti, Cuba and USA. Until now, about 1000 people were killed in this disaster. According to the TV show and Google research, more than 200000 folk houses were destroyed in Haiti, and 150000 residents were injured. However, all though the hurricane Matthew has left Haiti already, but almost 80% farmlands were damaged. On Oct.7th, the hurricane Matthew has been arriving United States. Near 200000 household and enterprises were disrupted and suffered from power cut. The record of strongest hurricane was broken by Matthew since 2007.

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My Grammar and writing course homework on Oct.13/2016

Required: Use six special verbs to make a paragraph, talk about an accident or disaster, those verbs MUST use passive voice: destroy, injure, damage, kill, break, disrupt.

Daphne (Ting Wang)
103GW Lana.K
Oct.13/2016

Hurricane Matthew

hurricane Matthew has been striking Haiti, Cuba and USA. Until now, about 1000 people were killed in this disaster. According to the News and Google research, more than 200000 folk houses were destroyed in Haiti, and 150000 residents were injured. However, all though hurricane Matthew has left Haiti already, about 80% of the farmlands were damaged.
On Oct.7th, hurricane Matthew has been arriving United States. Near 200000 household and enterprises were disrupted and suffered from power cuts.
The record of strongest hurricane was broken by Matthew since 2007.

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Hurricane Matthew

The hHurricane Matthew [0] has been striking Haiti, Cuba and USA. Until now, about 1000 people were killed in this disaster. According to the TV show and Google research, more than 200,000 [1] folk rural [2] houses were destroyed in Haiti, and 150,000 residents were injured. However, all though although the hurricane Matthew has already left Haiti already, but  [4]almost 80% farmlands were damaged.
On Oct.7th, the hurricane Matthew has been  arriving United States [3]. Near 200,000 households and enterprises were disrupted and suffered from power cut.
The record of the strongest hurricane was broken by Matthew since 2007.

[0] - consider this - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hurricane_Katrina 

[1] - usually in English they do separate digits, not an error per se, but nevertheless makes it more readable

[2] - folk - relates to culture and people. I guess you mean related to countryside...

[3] - it's a plain fact. past simple is better

[4] - you have although, why do you need but?


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