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Crime - IELTS Crime rates has been increasing a lot during the 20 years and one of the main reasons for such event is due to high poverty and the lack of education. Several studies has found that one of the ways to solve this problem is increasing the competitiveness and improving the current system education. A high poverty in the society make the natural human instinct to survive speak louder, which it means to do what is necessary to improve his own condition. In addition, due to the lack of education and more specialized skills, a person in needed is more likely to find illegal and faster manners to solve such a problem, as committing crimes. A more competitive environment would if not solve the problem, deeply decrease it. Such environment can be reached by reducing the inequality among people, with financial supports for those with less opportunity in life. Also, investing in education and make it accessible for those not so fortunate, will turn a population with more better options to improve the quality of their lives and so that there will not be the necessity to appeal to illegal ways. Finally, although it well known that crime rates has increased over time, it is also known what to do to solve the problem. It is not an easy duty, but with the correct investment of the government in order to reduce the poverty and improve our system education, such problem can be resolved or reduced, and also it will end up in a more reach society and country, leading the other consequent improvements.

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Crime - IELTS

Crime rates has have been increasing a lot during the last 20 years, and one two of the main reasons for such events is are due to high poverty and the lack of education. Several studies has have found that one of the ways to solve this problem is increasing the competitiveness and improving the current system of education.

A High poverty in the society makes the natural human instinct to survive speak louder, which it means to do what is necessary to improve his own condition situation. In addition, due to the lack of education and more specialized skills, a person in needed is more likely to find illegal and faster manners to solve such a problem, such as committing crimes.

A more competitive environment would, if not solve the problem, deeply decrease it. Such an environment can be reached by reducing the inequality among people, with financial supports for those with less opportunity in life. Also, investing in education and make making it accessible for those not so fortunate, will turn a population with more better options to improve the quality of their lives, and so that therefore there will not be the necessity to appeal to get involved in illegal ways.

Finally, although it is well known that crime rates has have increased over time, it is also known what to do to solve the problem. It is not an easy duty, but with the correct investment of by the government in order to reduce the poverty and improve our system education, such problems can be resolved or reduced, and also it will end up in a more reachable society and country, leading the to other consequent improvements.

You have some very long sentences. I think you should try to shorten them.


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I believe so, but I wrote that in order do an IETLS simulation with the following topic: "Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?" To topic already state that the crime rate has increased... so that I had to follow the flow...
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If you are talking about crime rates in the US, they have been plummeting in the past 20 years. Violent crime is near an all-time low.

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