Would you please correct my writing

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I only see two errors, which is great! I hope this helps

Would you please correct my writing

What are the factors that will impede or facilitate the continuation of the cardiac rehabilitation of a patient who has started the program? 

Is it a matter of personality variables, such as their sense of well-being; their degree of socialization, as in their acceptance of rules and regulations; and their sense of communality, meaning their view of themselves as having the common goals and interest with others?

Or, it is because of the variables in their self-efficacy in performing a specified activity;  ability to see improvements; willingness to refer their problem to a physician; and their view on how the program has impacted their lives?

Or, perhaps it is dependent on the degree of social support or motivation they have , the extent of the influences of others, their ability in helping themselves and so on.

When you use "such as", its wise not to give practically the whole list , because this introductory phrase means that you just going to give a few examples --not a lot of them or all, which then will be too long and complicating, which you have just done.

And you therefore do not end a clause that starts with "such as/for examples" with "so on" at the end.