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Air pollution Nowadays, it is easy to notice that air pollution has increased potentially bringing about some diseases and climate change. As it is known, the main cause is man and if everyone wants a change they have to work on it now. To begin with, some measures have to be taken regarding the traffic in the city centre. A useful suggestion would be to introduce to the government a park and ride scheme; in this way, the city centre would have fewer cars because of the better circulation the streets would acquire. Secondly, the fabrics that are near the city have been presenting lots of troubles polluting every day a little more. It would be a good idea if an industrial park was created; this would keep less smoke over the city and maintain the respiratory health of the citizens in a favourable way. Last but not least, due to the fact that people are making huge amounts of rubbish daily, some run into the idea of burning it. It would help if a recycle scheme was introduced to the public; the result of doing this would be having less burnt rubbish smoke that affects the city’s environment and damages the ozone layer. All in all, people should realize that the planet is not going to last for ever and neither do they. Yet, working together they could help to expand the durability of the earth and then avoid the large number of phenomenons that have affected the society lately.

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Air Pollution

Nowadays, it is easy to notice that air pollution is getting worse and has potentially increased the occurrence of some diseases as well as being a key driver of climate change. The main culprit is man.  If people want change, the time to start is now.
To begin, measures need to be implemented to regulate the traffic omissions in the city centre. A useful suggestion would be to introduce to the government a park and ride system.  Doing this would result in the city centre having fewer cars resulting in improved air quality.
Secondly, the factories near the city have been a principle cause for increased pollution on a daily basis. It would be a good idea if an industrial park were created, which would lesson the accumulation of smoke over the city and eliminate the impact on the respiratory health of people who live in the city.
Last but not least,  the trash that people accumulate daily should be burned regularly, which would be part of a recycling initiative introduced to the city's inhabitants.  Such and initiative would result in having less smoke impacting the city’s environment and less pollution contributing to the damage of the ozone layer.
All in all, people need to realize that the planet will not be around forever and neither will we. Yet, working together we can increase the earth's longevity, which in turn would reduce the large number of phenomenons that have affected the world in recent years.
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Si no eres anglohablante y estas aprendiendo ingles, hiciste muy bien. Hice correcciones para hacer que tu parafo se leyera come si fuera escrito por un hablante nativo. But overall, very good content.

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