Toefl Integrated essay. PLEASE, WOULD YOU CHECK MY MISTAKES? THANK YOU :)
Chevalier de Seingalt's Memoir:
The reading and the lecture both discuss about the accuracy of Chevalier’s memoir. The reading suggest that most of the memoir had been unrealistic to attract public attention. However, the professor explain that every detail of the memoir is true.
Firstly, the reading states that Chevalier was not rich in Switzerland, because it was found that he borrowed money from a swiss merchant. On the other hand, the lecture holds that Chevalier exchanged his lands for money so he can spend it on parties, this was common in the old times.
Secondly, the reading said that Chevalier could not write specific details of his conversations with Voltaire, because he wrote his memories long time after the conversations. However, the professor states that Chevalier wrote down every night in notes all his conversations, so this helped him to remember it during his memoir.
Lastly, the reading holds that Chevalier did not escape from prision in Venice, actually he used his influences to be release. On the contrary, the lecture states that there is information of the chief from prision asking the policies to repair the cealing of Chevalier’s celd from where he escape.
In conclusion, the speaker holds that the Memoirs of Chevalier were accurately, people who knew him said that he always confirm every note he has when doing his memoir.
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Toefl Integrated essay. PLEASE, WOULD YOU CHECK MY MISTAKES? THANK YOU :)
Chevalier de Seingalt's Memoir:This reading and the lecture both concern the accuracy of Chevalier’s memoir. The reading suggests that most of the memoir had been unrealistic (in trying?) to attract public attention. The professor explains that every detail of the memoir is true.
Firstly, the reading states that Chevalier was not rich in Switzerland, because it was found that he borrowed money from a Swiss merchant. On the other hand, the lecture holds that Chevalier sold his lands to spend the money on parties as was common those days.
Secondly, the reading said that Chevalier could not write specific details of his conversations with Voltaire, because he wrote his memoires a long time after the conversations. However, the professor states that Chevalier wrote down every night in notes all his conversations, so this helped him to remember them for his memoir.
Lastly, the reading holds that Chevalier did not escape from prison in Venice and, in reality, he used his influence to be released. On the contrary, the lecture states that there is information from the prison chief asking the police to repair the ceiling of Chevalier’s cell from where/which he escaped.
In conclusion, the speaker holds that the Memoirs of Chevalier were accurate and that the people who knew him said that he always confirmed his every note when writing his memoir.
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