The Stranger. Part 2. Evolution. Please, correct my mistakes.
Damien goes on to get used to his new life on the Druid's Island. .
As usually Lisa joined me when I ran to the Valley. We just sat on the river's coast and beheld the most wonderful picture. I've been here for about a mounth, however the local nature still make delight to my sight...
"I care about my condition. My progress is so slow." I said.
"Everything has own time. Your body needs toget used to new world. Although the changes are going to better direction you have to wait some time. Just train. Little later you can choose any knowledge to learn. So your progress will be faster than now" Lisa answered.
"Why can't I begin right now if new knowledge would improve my skills and condition?"
"The time will come to begin. You need to collect enough of will. Otherwise it only can prevent you. Next week you'll discover the new land. Just run there every week. It's about 8 miles. So you'll begin running more distance" She said
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The Stranger. Part 2. Evolution. Please, correct my mistakes.
Damien goes on to get used to his new life on the Druid's Island. .As usual Lisa joined me when I ran to the Valley. We just sat on the river's coast (riverside) and beheld the most wonderful view. I've been here for about a month, however the local nature never ceases to amaze me (lots of things you can put here)...
"I'm worried about my condition. My progress is so slow." I said.
"Everything comes in time. Your body needs to get used to the/this new world. Although the changes are improving, you have to wait some time. Just train. A little later you can choose any skill/ability to improve/work on. So your progress will be faster than now" Lisa answered.
"Why can't I begin right now if new knowledge would improve my skills and condition?"
"The time will come to begin. You need to increase your will(willpower). Otherwise it can only prevent you (usually you are prevented FROM something). Next week you'll discover the new land. Just run there every week. It's about 8 miles. So You'll start/begin to be able to run more distance" She said
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I would suggest using less of "so", there are many words you can use! Try therefore, or many other words that perform similar functions. Not bad!
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