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Could you correct my writing please? Case’s one idea In this case, President Barack Obama is not only using internet for networking and fundraising. However, he also relied on decision support system to identify potential swing voters. Both presidential candidates hired information technology expert to recognize important voters. In addition, both presidential candidates being suppported by MIS to reach the voters.

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Could you correct my writing please?

Case one idea:
In this case, President Barack Obama is not only using the internet for networking and fundraising, but he also relied on a decision support system to identify potential swing voters. Both presidential candidates hired information technology experts to identify potential voters. In addition, both presidential candidates are being suppported by MIS to reach the voters.
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Could you correct my writing please?

Case’s one idea
In this case, President Barack Obama is not only using internet for networking and fundraising, but also relying on a decision support system to identify potential swing voters. Both presidential candidates hired information technology experts to (identify, locate, discover, find, seek out, etc...) important voters. In addition, both presidential candidates were supported by MIS to reach the voters.

The second to last sentence, I felt that 'recognize' was not the right word for this sentence, so I provided some options for change that I though sounded right. You can decide which to use based on how you want to make this paragraph sound.

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