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Please correct my grammar and give me some advice, thank you Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Every parent want children to get high grades in school, however, most children like playing games rather than studying, though every parent harbors his own method to encourage student to study hard, I think offering school-age children money for each high grade they get in school is a good idea. Admittedly, offering children money may let them court for money, they may have a though that everything can be solved by money, they are industrious just for getting money. However, parents can teach them in this process, and offering their children can incite their motivation of studying. For example, a child may do not like studying at the beginning, then his parents offer him money for his good grade, therefore, he can takes advantage of the money to buy toys and snacks, so he begins to be hard-working, with time going, he would perform well in the school and become an outstanding person. In addition, it pays to offer children for their good grade on the grounds that they can learn to earn money by themselves in this process. The children can get money for their good grades, so every time he wants money he need to get good grades, so he will know that he can get money by his endeavor, so he will be more independent.

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Please correct my grammar and give me some advice, thank you

Some parents offer/reward their school-age children with money for each high grade (exam results) that their children get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Every parent wants their children to get high grades for their exams in school; however, most children like playing games more/rather than studying. though/Nevertheless, every parent harbors has his their own method to encourage student their children to study hard, such as I think offering their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school, which I think is a good idea.

Admittedly, offering rewarding their children with money may let make them court money-minded , they may  think have a though that everything/every problem can be solved by money; and this is no different, for they think that it will make their children are more industrious in their studies , even if it is just for money sake. just for getting money.

However, some parents can teach them in this process, and like to think otherwise , for they think that by offering rewarding their children with money  can incite their motivation of to study. For example, a child may do not like studying at/in the beginning, and when their parents offer to reward them offer him money for their good grades, therefore, he they may want to can take advantage of the situation to get some  money to for buying toys and snacks. So, the child may begins then begin to be hard-working, and  with time the passing of time, going, the child may change and would start to perform well in the school. and He may even become an outstanding individual /person/ later on in life
In addition, it pays to offer reward children for their good grades on the grounds that it helps their children  they can learn to about earning money by for themselves. in this process. Since their children know that they will can get money for their good grades, so every he wants money he they will try to need get good grades whenever  they want money. so They will know that they will can get money rewarded for by their endeavors, so thereby making them he will be more independent.

Try to make your sentences shorter by not stringing several ideas together, lest you make more punctuation mistakes and the sentence more complex, unless it is necessary and you know how to.

Singular they > When a child cries, they normally want something ./ Who left this bag here? I will find out who they are. It is an acceptable form which bypass the gender issue in our writing, replacing the cumbersome "he or she" form . Or, you can change the subject ( a child) to a plural form of it ( some children ), then you can continue to relate back to them by using "they and "them".

To offer is to give something to someone , but the acceptance of the offer may or may not be rejected. May I offer you this chair? I offer him a new pay package ?

To reward >

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