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Sales Comparison Writing practice The bar chart shows worldwide datas of Games Software, DVD/Video and CDs from 2000 to 2003. Overall, in 2000 the global sales in CDs was around 35 billion dollars, however had a slight decline throughout the period. By other hand global sales in DVD/video gradually increased throughout the period. Also the Games Software sales had an increment but was a slight rise compared to DVD/video sales. In 2000 CDs sales had around 35 billion dollars but in 2001 started to fall until 2003 finishing approximately just over 31 billion dollars. In contrast to CDs sales, DVD video sales started just under 20 billion dollars in 2000, two years later had a considerable rise around 25 billion dollars finishing in 2003 just over 30 billion dollars, near to the CD sales. Unlike a gradual increase of CDs sales, Games software sales had a rise slightly; the sales of these items increased from around 13 billion dollars in 2000 to about just under 20 billion dollars in 2003.

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Sales Comparison Writing practice

The bar chart shows worldwide datas of Games Software, DVD/Video and CD's from 2000 to 2003.

Overall, in 2000 the global sales in CD's was around 35 billion dollars, however the sales had a slight decline throughout the year. On the other hand, global sales in DVD/video gradually increased throughout the year. Also, the Game Software sales had an increase but it was a slight rise compared to the DVD/video sales.

In 2000 CD sales were around 35 billion dollars but in 2001 started to fall until 2003 finishing approximately just over 31 billion dollars. In contrast to CD sales, DVD video sales started just under 20 billion dollars in 2000 and two years later had a considerable rise around to 25 billion dollars finishing in 2003 just over 30 billion dollars, near to the CD sales. Unlike a gradual increase of CDs sales, Games software sales had a rise slightly; the sales of these items increased from around 13 billion dollars in 2000 to about just under 20 billion dollars in 2003.

Very Good! I don't know how to correct the last sentence. "Gradual increase" and "slight increase" mean almost the same thing so I'm not sure what you were trying to say. 

-Mike

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