Dream recorder! Hi guys! In an English course I'm taking I was requested to prepare a speech/presentation of a proposed new product that I would need to convince some investor to buy the idea! It's

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Dream recorder! Hi guys! In an English course I'm taking I was requested to prepare a speech/presentation of a proposed new product that I would need to convince some investor to buy the idea! It's an idea similar to the TV show "Shark Tank". Check it out and tell me what you think! My project is about a Dream Recorder. Have you ever had a dream that you wanted to remember but your hardly remembered fractions of it? What if you could record your dreams and watch them when you wake up? Did you know that, according to academic researches, our brain gets much more creative when we are asleep? Then, what if we could catch this creativity that usually we can barely remember? By connecting some wireless sensors to you head before you go to sleep, those sensors will read the activity in your brain while you are sleeping and convert it to signals that will be sent to your computer or to your smartphone. A program installed on your computer or smartphone will convert the signals into images that will help you remembering your dreams. We have the basic project already, but we need some financing to help us developing a more accurate imagine conversion. So far, our software can identify precise information of which part of the brain had been activated during the sleep. By understanding which part of the brain is associated with happiness, satisfaction, sadness, fear, angry, etc., we can tell if you had a good or a bad dream. But we still can’t convert it to images. We offer our expertise in neurological analysis, but we need engineering support to work with the collected data. We believe this is a billion dollars’ idea. This is why we are here today, to offer the opportunity to join us in this fantastic opportunity!

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Dream Recorder!

Hi guys!

In an English course (that) I'm taking I was asked to prepare a presentation of a potential new product, the idea of which I would need to convince an investor to buy. The assignment is similar to the TV show, "Shark Tank." Check it out and tell me what you think! My project is a "dream recorder."

Have you ever had a dream that you wanted to remember, but upon waking up you could hardly recall it at all? What if you could record your dreams and then watch them once you've awakened? Did you know that, according to academic research, our brain is much more creative when we are asleep? What if we could capture this creativity?

By placing wireless sensors that record brain activity on your head before you fall asleep, you can learn more about how your brain functions whilst in a resting state. A program installed on your computer or smartphone will convert the electronic signals sent from the sensors into images that will help you remember your dreams.

We have a preliminary model of the Dream Recorder created, but we need more financing to help us develop a more accurate dream-to-image conversion. So far, our software can identify which part of the brain had been activated during a given sleep cycle. By understanding which individual parts of the brain are associated with emotion, we can tell if one experienced a good or a bad dream. Unfortunately, we are still unable to convert this information to image format. We offer our expertise in neurological analysis, but we need engineering support to work with the collected data. We believe this could be a multi-billion dollar concept, which is why we are here today... To offer you the opportunity to join us in this life-altering, business venture.

Dream recorder!

In and English course I'm taking I was asked to prepare a speech/presentation regarding a proposed new product, the idea of which I would need to sell to an investor. It's an idea similar to the TV show "Shark Tank". Check it out and tell me what you think! My project is about developing a Dream Recorder.

Have you ever had a dream that you wanted to remember but your hardly remembered fractions of it? What if you could record your dreams and watch them when you wake up? Did you know that, according to academic researches, our brain gets much more creative when we are asleep? Then, what if we could catch this creativity that usually we can barely remember?

Have you ever had a dream that you wanted to recall but upon waking you could hardly remember it at all? What if you could record your dreams and play them [watch them] back when you wake up? Did you know that, according to academic researches, our brain is much more creative when we are asleep? What if we could capture this creativity that we usually barely remember?

By connecting some wireless sensors to you head before you go to sleep, those sensors will read the activity in your brain while you are sleeping and convert it to signals that will be sent to your computer or to your smartphone. A program installed on your computer or smartphone will convert the signals into images that will help you remembering your dreams.

By connecting some wireless sensors to your head before you go to sleep, these sensors would read the activity produced by your brain whilst you sleep and covert it into electronic signals. These signals could then be sent to your computer or smarphone and would be converted back into images by an app to help you remember your dreams.

We have the basic project already, but we need some financing to help us developing a more accurate imagine conversion. So far, our software can identify precise information of which part of the brain had been activated during the sleep. By understanding which part of the brain is associated with happiness, satisfaction, sadness, fear, angry, etc., we can tell if you had a good or a bad dream. But we still can’t convert it to images. We offer our expertise in neurological analysis, but we need engineering support to work with the collected data. We believe this is a billion dollars’ idea. This is why we are here today, to offer the opportunity to join us in this fantastic opportunity!

We already have the basics for this project, but we need more funding to enable us to develop a much more accurate image conversion. Our current software can identify precise information pertaining to which parts of the brain are being activated during sleep. By determining and understanding which parts of the brain are associated with emotions such as happiness, satisfaction, fear and anger, etc., we are able to determine whether you have had a pleasant or disturbing dream. However, we are still not able to convert these signals into images. We offer our expertise in neurological analysis but we need engineering support to work with the data collected. We believe this could be a [multi?] billion dollar concept, which is why we are here today; to offer you the opportunity in joining us in this fantastic venture!

Dream recorder!

Hi guys!

In an English course, I'm taking I was requested to prepare a speech/presentation of a proposed new product that I would need to convince some investor to buy the idea! It's an idea similar to the TV show "Shark Tank". Check it out and tell me what you think! My project is about a Dream Recorder.

Have you ever had a dream that you wanted to remember but your you can hardly remembered fractions of it? What if you could record your dreams and watch them when you wake woke up? Did you know that, according to academic researches, research your brain gets much more creative when we are asleep you are asleep? Then, What if we could catch this creativity that usually we We usually barely remember?

By connecting some wireless sensors to you your head before you go to sleep, those The sensors will read the activity in your brain while you are sleeping and convert it into signals that will be sent to your computer or to your smartphone. A program installed on your computer or smartphone will convert the signals into images that will help you remembering your dreams.

We have the basic project already, but we need some financing to help us developing a more accurate imagine conversion. So far, our software can identify precise information of which part of the brain had has been activated during the sleep. By understanding which part of the brain is associated with happiness, satisfaction, sadness, fear, angry e, etc., we can tell if you had a good or a bad dream. But we still can’t convert it to images. We offer our expertise in neurological analysis, but we need engineering support to work with the collected data. We believe this is a billion dollars’ idea. This is why we are here today, to offer the opportunity to join us in this fantastic opportunity!

Dream recorder!

Hi guys!

In an English course I'm taking I was requested to prepare a speech/presentation of a proposed new product that I would need to convince some investor to buy the idea! It's an idea similar to the TV show "Shark Tank". Check it out and tell me what you think! My project is about a Dream Recorder.

Have you ever had a dream that you wanted to remember but your hardly remembered fractions any parts of it? What if you could record your dreams and watch them when you wake up? Did you know that, according to academic researches, our brain gets much more creative when we are asleep? Then, w What if we could catch this creativity that usually we can barely remember?

By connecting some wireless sensors to your head before you go to sleep, those sensors will read the activity in your brain while you are sleeping and convert it to signals that will be sent to your computer or to your smartphone. A program installed on your computer or smartphone will convert the signals into images that will help you remembering your dreams.

We have the basic project already, but we need some financing to help us developing a more accurate imageine conversion. So far, our software can identify precise information of which part of the brain had been activated during the sleep. By understanding which part of the brain is associated with happiness, satisfaction, sadness, fear, angry, etc., we can tell if you had a good or a bad dream. But we still can’t convert it to images. We offer our expertise in neurological analysis, but we need engineering support to work with the collected data. We believe this is a billion dollars’ idea. This is why we are here today, to offer the opportunity to join us in this fantastic opportunity!

Very cool assignment! I like the creativity! Most errors made were due to awkward phrasing and poor word choice, but such mistakes can be easily fixed with a dictionary (to find appropriate synonyms) and some rearranging of, and careful attention to, grammatical sentence structures. Well done! Keep up the great work!

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