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The reasons that I think it is not worth hosting Olympic Games I totally disagree to host Olympic Games. I have joined two Olympic Games as a volunteer. I saw the changes happens in those countries which host the Olympic Games. Of coures it is indeed a big event when the IOC announced which city has the right to host the next Olympic Games. They cheer for it. They shout of crying. They are all soaked in excitement. But later you will see the pros and cons of hosting it. Especially the part of cons. I will make a metaphore to explain how I see this. It seems a big opportunity for a person to invite a super star to their home. Yeah, One day A got this chance like win a lottery. It make him think that if he entertain the super star well. Maybe he could be famous as well. Maybe he could climb the social ladder from the bottom all the way to the very top. So he advance one year expenses of the house keeping. Then this is far away enough. He borrow money from neighbers. He needs a face-lift for his house. He called in a masterchef from famous hotels for meals. Could you guess what the results was? Of course he entertains the celebraty well. This certainly could give a very big chance for the man to become famous. But this really need a long time before he could pay back the money he borrow from his neighbours. How he get the money for the whole family living next one year.

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The reasons that I think it is not worth hosting the Olympic Games

I totally disagree to with hosting the Olympic Games. I have joined worked at two Olympic Games as a volunteer. I saw the changes that occurred in those countries which hosted them. Of course, it is indeed a big event when the IOC announce which city has the right to host the next Olympic Games. They cheer for it. They shout of crying cry (I'm not sure what you're trying to say here). They are all soaked in excitement (This sentence makes sense, but sounds odd. 'They revel in excitement.' would be better). But now you will see the pros and cons of hosting it; especially the part of cons. I will make use a metaphor to explain how I see this.
It seems like a big opportunity for a person to be able to invite a superstar to their home. Yeah, One day, A got this chance, like winning a lottery. It made him think that if he entertained the super star well, maybe he could be famous too. Maybe he could climb the social ladder from the bottom all the way to the very top. So he pays for a year of housekeeping. But this is far from enough. He borrows money from his neighbours (British spelling). He needs a face-lift for his house. He calls in a masterchef from famous hotels for meals. Can you guess what the results were? Of course, he entertains the celebrity well. This certainly could have given him a very good opportunity for the man to become famous. But this really now he needs a lot of time before he could in order to pay back the money he borrowed from his neighbours. How can he get all the money back for the whole family living next in just one year.

Very good work. Some of these changes are grammatical, others one are to make it sound more fluent and native.

Also, during your metaphor - the verbs 'pays', 'borrows', 'needs', 'calls', 'entertains' could all be written in the past tense as 'paid', 'borrowed', 'needed', 'called', 'entertained' and that would also make sense; as long as they are all written in the same tense.

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