My third essay

Direction : Joseph Epstein, the famous American writer, once said, " we decide what is important and what is trivial in life; we decide what makes us significant is either what we do or what we refuse to do. But no matter how indifferent the universe may be to our choices and decisions, these choices and decisions are ours to make. We decide. We chose. And as we decide and choose, so are our lives formed. In the end, forming our own destiny is what ambition is about." Do you agree or disagree with him? Write an essay of about 250 words.

My essay:


Ambition
Joseph Epstein said," Forming our own destiny is what ambition is about." Is ambition so important to people as it is cracked up to be? In my opinion, granted that ambition does exert a profound influence on people, our destiny is formed by a more complicated mix of factors.
The first factor is our family. From the food we are fed, to the education we are prepared to get, we have all those in the first life phase thanks to our family. Second, apart from the influence of family background, people's efforts and health also make a difference. Even though we might make up our mind to be somebody, for example, a most decorated Olympic athelete, we still need to be persistent, humble, sober, and make every effort for the games and keep ourselves in rude health. If we fail to do that, we will fall short in our goals no matter how ambitious we are. Furthermore, just as family background, efforts and health are pivotal, so too is the luck we are endowed with which is undeniably necessary for us to play our cards right.
To sum up, it is not only ambition that informs our life destiny. Complicated as life is, it is influenced by many facets of what are in people's life. However, all in all, we should humbly double our efforts so as to live a happier life.


The essay in the picture is an example for it in the book. But I think it is not good as it doesn't suit what Epstein really means. Am I the one who got it wrong?

Very well written!