I like swimming!
I like summer most because I love swimming. First, I can swim well, so swimming gives me a sense of achievement. Actually I am not good at most of sports but swimmming is a exception.
What is more, swimming can build up my strength. Several years ago when I could not swim, I caught colds almost once a month. But recent few years, I seldom catch colds and instead, I can get good indications from my anual physical examinations. With a health body, I can do many things that I could only think about before. That's really awesome!
Help me make it more “native", please!
Thank you very much!
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red=mistakes that need to be corrected=写错了,得改一改
blue=sounds better=听起来更好
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I like swimming!
I like summer, mostly because I love swimming. First, I can swim well, so swimming gives me a sense of achievement. Actually I am not good at most of sports but swimming is an exception.What is more, swimming can build up my strength. Several years ago when I could not swim, I caught colds almost once a month. But recent for the last few years, OR: in recent years I've seldom catch caught colds, and instead I can get good indications from on my annual physical examinations. With a healthy body, I can do many things that I could only think about before. That's really awesome!
Help me make it more “native", please!
Thank you very much!
What's your favorite stroke? I've always loved backstroke and butterfly.
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I like swimming!
I like summer most because I love swimming. First, I can swim well, so swimming gives me a sense of achievement. Actually I am not good at most of sports but swimming is an exception.What is more, swimming can build up my strength. Several years ago when I could not swim, I caught colds almost once a month. But in recent few years, I seldom catch colds and instead, I can get good results from my annual physical check-ups. With a health body, I can do many things that I could only think about before. That's really awesome!
Help me make it more “native", please!
Thank you very much!
It was very well written in a 'native' style (viz in the colloquial).
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