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Dear bat Dear bat, I knew you were afraid of me just like I was afraid of you that night. If you didn't leave so many shit on my floor, I might could keep you as my pet. After all you look like the little dragon Night fury in the animated film "How to train your dragon", kind of. Before seeing you clearly, I thought it was a mouse lying under my violet suitcase that behind the curtain of the living room. I was so scared, in my whole life I have never seen a mouse in my room. Early that sunday morning, I found some black tiny stuff on the floor, kind of animal's shit. "I'm so dead", I thought. In the afternoon, I got off work a little early to buy the glue rat board. Unexpectedly, two days later you got musilage glue all over yourself and couldn't fly any more, haha. Actually, I plucked up all my courage to kick you out of my flat with a broom. Sincerely, hope you are ok now. Because if one of the neighbors is a creepy weirdo, he might have caught you home and eaten you already after he found you trapping on the floor in the hallway.

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Dear bat

Dear bat, I know you were afraid of me just like I was afraid of you that night. If you didn't leave hadn't left so many much shit on my floor, I might could have been able to keep you as my pet. We use "much" for non-count nouns, "many" for count-nouns: "so much water", "so many dogs".  "Shit" is almost always non-count: "so much shit".  After all you look like the little dragon Night Fury in the animated film "How to Train your Dragon", kind of.
Before seeing you clearly, I thought it was a mouse lying under my violet suitcase, which that was behind the curtain of in the living room. I was so really scared, because in my whole life I have never seen a mouse in my room.
Early that Sunday morning, I found some black tiny tiny black stuff on the floor,"Royal order of adjectives":https://www.lavc.edu/profdev/library/docs/Adjectives-and-adverbs.aspx some kind of animal's shit. "I'm so dead", I thought. In the afternoon, I got off work a little early to buy the a glue rat board. Unexpectedly, two days later you got musilage glue all over yourself and couldn't fly any more, haha.
Actually, I plucked up all my courage to kick you out of my flat with a broom. I Sincerely hope you are ok now. Because if one of the neighbors is a creepy weirdo, he might have caught taken you home and eaten you already after he found you trapped on the floor in the hallway.

Funny! :)

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Thank you and living in rainforest sounds very interesting:)
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I love this! My only correction is in Sentence 2--it would be "if you didn't leave so much shit on my floor" rather than "so many shit." I lived in the rainforest of Costa Rica when my son was a little boy and one night he was yelling for me saying that a moth was in his room. I went in and a bat was dive-bombing him as he laid in the bed, petrified with fear. A very big moth!

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