My favorite teacher (pls help me to correct it, thank you very much!) :-) When it comes to my favorite teacher, that must be my science teacher when I was in senior high school. Actually in my mind,

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My favorite teacher (pls help me to correct it, thank you very much!) :-) When it comes to my favorite teacher, that must be my science teacher when I was in senior high school. Actually in my mind, more than a science teacher, she is my friend. Unlike other teachers who only care about students' study or worse, she cares about our lives. For instance, one day I lost my key and could not return home to have lunch, she noticed that and invited me to have lunch with her. I was only about 11 years old at that time and felt that she was kind like my mom. What's more, she taught us how an independent individual should be like. Thanks to her, I knew that responsibility and love are very important to everyone, which can be a bridge to one's personal network. I know that it sounds not "native" enough for oral English. Can you help me?

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My favourite teacher (pls help me to correct it, thank you very much!) :-)

When it comes to my favourite teacher, I would say it was my science teacher when I was in senior high school. Actually in my mind, she was more than a science teacher, she was my friend. Unlike other teachers who only cared about students' studies or less, she cared about our wellbeing. For instance, one day I lost my key and could not return home to have lunch. She noticed my situation and invited me over to have lunch with her. I was only about 11 years old at the time and felt that she was kind, like my mum.
What's more, she taught us how an independent individual should be. Thanks to her, I knew that responsibility and love are both very important, they can be a bridge to a stronger personal network.

I know that it doesn't sound "native" enough for oral English. Can you help me?

This is the English version :P Canadians and Americans will have different phrasing. :)

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My favorite teacher (pls help me to correct it. Thank you very much!) :-)

When it comes to my favorite teacher, that must be my science teacher when I was in senior high school. My favorite teacher ever must be my senior-high science teacher. We don't use "when it comes to" very often. Actually, in my mind, more than a science teacher, she is my friend. she is a friend more than a teacher. Unlike other teachers who only care about students' study grades or worse, she cares about our lives. For instance, one day when I lost my key and could not return home to have lunch, she noticed, that and invited me to have lunch with her. I was only about 11 years old at that time and felt that she was kind, like my mom.
What's more, she taught us how what an independent individual should be like. OR: "...how an independent individual should behave" Thanks to her, I knew came to know that responsibility and love are very important to everyone, which and can be a bridge bridges to one's personal network. We use "came to X" or "grew to X" to talk about changes and processes in the past. "At first I hated her, but I came to love her."

I know that it sounds not doesn't sound "native" enough for oral English. Can you help me?

My favorite teacher (pls help me to correct it, thank you very much!) :-)

If anyone asks me who is my favorite teacher , It will certainly be the science teacher who taught me in my senior high school. Actually in my mind, she is not only the person who imparts knowledge but also be my friend. Unlike other teachers who only focus on students' study or worse, she cares about our lives. For instance, one day I lost my key so I could not return home for lunch, she noticed that and asked me to have lunch with her. I was only about 11 years old at that time and felt that she was kind like my mom.
What's more, she taught us how an independent individual should be like. Thanks to her, I knew that responsibility and love are of importance to everyone, which can be a bridge to one's personal network.

I know that it sounds not "native" enough for oral English. Can you help me?

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