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Diary:002 I wrote my diary 002! If you have a free time, could you correct it for me? Thanks. Diary 002 If you could cry on anyone's shoulder, whose would it be? ⇨I would cry my friends' shoulder, but especially Yoshie's and Miki's. They're my best friends. When I cry on their shoulder, they always give me some Google advices. Also they try to make me smile.

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Diary:002

I wrote my diary 002! If you have a some free time, could you correct it for me? Thanks.

Diary 002
If you could cry on anyone's shoulder, whose would it be?
⇨I would cry on my friends' shoulder, but especially Yoshie's and Miki's. They're my best friends. When I cry on their shoulder, they always give me some Google advicesadvice. Also they try to make me smile.
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Diary:002

I wrote my diary 002! If you have a free time, could you correct it for me? Thanks.

Diary 002
If you could cry on anyone's shoulder, whose would it be?
⇨I would cry on my friends' shoulders, but especially Yoshie's and Miki's. They're my best friends. When I cry on their shoulders, they always give me some Google advices. Also they try to make me smile.
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Diary:002

I've wrote written my diary entry 002! If you have a free time moment*, could you correct it for me? Thanks.

Diary 002
If you could cry on anyone's shoulder, whose shoulder** would it be?
⇨I would cry my friends' shoulders, but especially Yoshie's and Miki's. They're my best friends. When I cry on their shoulders, they always give me some Google good advices***. Also tThey also try to make me smile.


* You can say "a free moment" or "a moment of free time."

** It is not necessary to repeat "shoulder" but I think it sounds better this way. I understand that this was the prompt in the diary-book, so it's not a mistake, and it is usually not good to repeat a word. But I think this sounds nicer.

*** Did you mean to write "good" and not "Google"? Also, advice should be singular. (It is possible to say "pieces of advice" but "give me good advice" sounds more natural.

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私の考えすぎでしたか。。笑。でも、Goole advice ってありそうだけどなあ。。笑。ご返事いただきありがとうございます。
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わたしのtypoです、、、申し訳ございません。good adviceのことでした。

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