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Do you like mountain climbing When it comes to my favorite outdoor activity, I'd like to talk about mountain climbing. Although I'm still afraid of height, I'd love to climb the mountain near our university, because the scene is really eyecatching. My friends and I went to there about twice a month, and we could enjoy the fresh air, the sight seeing of the beautiful bamboo forest and the tasty food in local restaurants when we reached the peak of the mountain. I said the food is delicious, because the cooking technique is very good and edible materials are produced by the residents on the mountain. On the other hand, we could also play mahJong during the time we waited the dishes, which is considered to be the most funny part of the whole activity. Generally, climbing the mountain always costed us 5-6 hours, and finally we were exhausted, but I felt happy and refreshed after climbing it, since nearly every cell in my body was activated, and full of energy. Hence, I could work more efficiently during work days.

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Do You Like Mountain Climbing？We capitalize titles

When it comes to my favorite outdoor activity, I'd like to talk about climbing mountains. 有时候英文真奇怪。 “mountain climbing” 意思是"用绳上崖"， 可是“climb a mountain/the mountain/mountains”意思就是“走路走到山峰”。Although I'm still afraid of heights, "afraid of heightS" is a set phrase I'd love to climb the mountain near our university, because the scenery is really eyecatching.  "scene"最常谈表演，“scenery”却谈山水。 My friends and I went to there about twice a month, 用”here“,"there"时，不要用”to“ and we could enjoy the fresh air, the chance to look out over the beautiful bamboo forest, and the tasty food in local restaurants when we reached the peak of the mountain.  When we use "sightseeing", we don't describe the sights we see!  "I went sightseeing in France."  "I went sightseeing through the Loire Valley."  I said the food was delicious, because the cooking techniques were very good and local foods were farmed and gathered by the residents of the mountain.  "Edible materials were produced" sounds sterile and scientific, like you are growing food in a laboratory. Also/In addition, we could also play mahJong while we waited for the dishes, which is considered to be the most enjoyable part of the whole activity.  "On the other hand" introduces something opposed to the last sentence.  "I'm allergic to chocolate, and get a rash whenever I eat it.  On the other hand, I love the way it tastes, so I eat it anyway." Generally, climbing the mountain always took us 5-6 hours, and after we finished we were exhausted, "finally" is usually used in lists: “first X， second Y, and finally Z”.  We also use it to mean that something happens later than we expected it to: "Bob said he would come at 3:00, but he left me waiting for a long time. He finally arrived at 5:00." but I felt happy and refreshed after climbing it, since nearly every cell in my body was activated and full of energy. Hence, I could work more efficiently during work days.

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