The Stranger. Part 2. Chapter 14. The house of rising sun. Please, correct my mistakes.
He walked in the dark house trying to see something. There were only shadows visible there. Suddenly they became to look like human's. In a few seconds they began follow him. Damien tried to run away. He hadn't any weapon then he noticed that he hadn't any way to go. It was a deadlock... Meanwhile they were coming closer...
"Damien, wake up!" Lisa said.
"We must get away from here! They are already going!"
"Calm down! Do you mean shadows?"
"Yes, exactly! How did you find out about that?"
"I saw them too when I was sleeping. They seemed agressive, but I don't think they will comr here today. Sunrise came resently" Lisa said.
Damien got up and saw the picturesque view. There was the sun shining the wood beyond the window...
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The Stranger. Part 2. Chapter 14. The house of rising sun. Please, correct my mistakes.
He walked in the dark house trying to see something. There were only shadows visible there. Suddenly they became began to look like humans. In a few seconds they began to follow him. Damien tried to run away. He hadn't any weapon then he noticed that he hadn't any way to go (Unless you want this to sound less 'standard English', I would say "He didn't have any weapon and noticed he didn't have any way to go" or "He had no weapons and noticed he had no way to go" or some combination of those phrases rather than "hadn't any"). It was a deadlock... Meanwhile they were coming closer..."Damien, wake up!" Lisa said ("said Lisa" is better, or maybe even shouted/screamed/whispered, something more descriptive?).
"We must get away from here! They are already going!"
"Calm down! Do you mean the shadows?"
"Yes, exactly! How did you find out about that?"
"I saw them too when I was sleeping. They seemed agressive, but I don't think they will come here today. Sunrise came recently" (Usually we don't use sunrise like that in English. You would probably say "The sun just came up")Lisa said.
Damien got up and saw the picturesque view. There was the sun shining in the wood beyond the window...
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He had neither any weapons nor any way to go.
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He had neither any weapons nor any way to go.
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