Before I come back to school,I want to say something!
I came back from my school yesterday because of Mid-Autumn Festival[My classmates and I were so excited about it.]. I came to my grandmother's home with my mum . The dumplings my mum made and the moon cake[Five kernel] is great.
Tomorrow I'll be back to school......I'm sad about that but I will work hard!
This is the first time that I write something in English by myself out of school.
And I feel a little scared about the coming of the English exam.
Today is Mid-Autumn Festival .Happy Mid-Autumn Festival!
It is said the moon is more round on 17th! I like staring the sky and I will enjoy the beautiful full moon in the school.
海上生明月，天涯共此时。
Let's enjoy the moon on 17th!
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ちょっと、恥ずかしいね(/ω＼*)
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Before I come back to school, I want to say something!
I came back from my school yesterday because of Mid-Autumn Festival [My classmates and I were so excited about it.]. I came to my grandmother's home with my mum. The dumplings my mum made and the moon cake [Five kernel] is was great.Tomorrow I'll be going back to school......I'm sad about that, but I will work hard!
This is the first time that I've written write something in English by myself out of school.
And I feel a little scared about the upcoming of the English exam.
Today is Mid-Autumn Festival. Happy Mid-Autumn Festival!
It is said the moon is more round on the 17th! I like staring at the sky and I will enjoy the beautiful full moon in the at school.
海上生明月，天涯共此时。
Let's enjoy the moon on the 17th!
__________________________________________________
ちょっと、恥ずかしいね(/ω＼*)
Hey Zhuwen! Nice entry - I also live in China and am enjoying the Mid-Autumn Festival :)
Here are some corrections to help you:
- If you have already used the past tense in a sentence, make sure you continue to do so in the rest. (...my mum made and the moon cake is great / ...my mum made and the moon cake was great)
- Don't forget to use the verbs for context. (I'll be back to school / I'll be going back to school)
- If you're talking about dates always use 'the' before the date. (on 17th / on the 17th)
I hope this will help you! Happy Mid-Autumn Festival!
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