IELTS Writing Task1 - Country of Origin of New Cars Sold in the USA in 2000 and 2005
The table illustrates the number of new cars sold in the USA from four country of origin in 2000 and 2005.
Overall,the number of total from four country of origin was decreased that from 7.7 million fell to 7.4 million in five year.The intensely differ of number in 2000 and 2005 from two countries,the USA and Japan,which countries had clearly rose and fell showed in table.
In fact,the number of the USA was 4.2 million that was the highest one than other countries in 2000.But also that had the extremely reducing in the four countries,from 4.2 million fell to 2.6 million in 2005.On the other hand,Japanese cars was the most increased between 2000 and 2005.The number of exchange form Japanese cars was from 2.2 million in 2000 to 2.6 million in 2005.However,the table shows the number of South Korea was 1.1 million in 2000 in similar to 1.1 million in 2005 without any changed.German cars was slightly rose from 0.2 million in 2000 to 0.3 million in 2005.
Obviously,the number of two countries from the USA and Japan in due to the fluctuations of number of total in the table.
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IELTS Writing Task1 - Country of Origin of New Cars Sold in the USA in 2000 and 2005
The table illustrates the number of new cars sold in the USA from four countries of origin (USA, Japan, Germany and South Korea) in 2000 and 2005.Overall, the total number of total from four country of origin was decreased that slightly from 7.7 million fell to 7.4 million in five years.The intensely??? differ of number in 2000 and 2005 (repetitive - no need to repeat this phrase) from two countries,the USA and Japan,which countries had clearly rose and fell showed in table.
There was a significant rise of over 50% in Japanese vehicles (from 2.2m to 3.4m) matched by an even larger fall of almost 40% in American sourced vehicles. The other two countries remained more or less constant.
In fact, the number of the USA vehicles was 4.2 million - that was the highest one than other of all countries in 2000; but USA also that had the most extremely reduction of in the four countries, from 4.2 million fell to 2.6 million in 2005. On the other hand, Japanese cars was the most increased most between 2000 and 2005 (repetitive).The change in the number of exchange form Japanese cars was from 2.2 million in 2000 to 2.6 million in 2005. However, the table shows the number of South Korean vehicles was stable at 1.1 million in 2000 in similar to 1.1 million in 2005 without any change, whilst German cars was rose slightly rose from 0.2 million in 2000 to 0.3 million in 2005.
Obviously, the fluctuation in the number of two countries from the USA and Japan in due to the fluctuations of number of explains the change in the total in the table.
Far too much repetition, both of facts and phrases. This is not a good analysis, sorry to say.
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