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Student should not use mobile phones in class Students can not concentrate on learning if they use mobile phones in class . Firstly , They could focus on social media rather than text book.According to Matchan(2015), students prefer using digital devices for texting,tweeting and video chatting during the lecture.If students are allowed to use smart phones during the class ,they may check the feed on the social media instead of studying. Secondly ,students may be distracted by games on the mobile phones . Nowadays , there are more and more interesting games on smart phones such as Pokemon Go , Driving School and so on .However, students are too young to control themselves . In South Australia ,children spend 67% of time playing online games when they on the Internet at home.(1345.4 - SA Stats, 2010) .So we can speculate that students would also spend much time on mobile phone games if they bring smart phones to class. Thus, it is clear that students should not use mobile phones in class because they would not focus on studying if they use electronic devices.

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Students should not use mobile phones in class

Students can not concentrate on learning if they use mobile phones in class . Firstly , They could end up focusing on social media rather than their text book. According to Matchan (2015), students prefer using digital devices for texting, tweeting and video chatting during lectures. If students are allowed to use smart phones during the class, they may check their feed on social media apps instead of studying. Secondly, students may be distracted by games on their mobile phones. Nowadays, there are more and more interesting games on smart phones such as Pokemon Go , Driving School and so on. However, students are too young to be able to control themselves. In South Australia, children spend 67% of time playing online games when they on the Internet at home (1345.4 - SA Stats, 2010). So we can speculate that students would also spend much (optional: a lot of) time on mobile phone games (optional: time on playing mobile games) if they bring their smart phones to class. Thus, it is clear that students should not use mobile phones in class because they would not and cannot focus on studying if they use electronic devices.

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It's pretty common to just say/ write - "mobile games" instead of 'mobile phone games' 

If you say 'the mobile phones' or 'check the feed on the social media' this implies that there is ONLY one mobile phone or social media. In this entry you use 'the' instead of 'their'. The best way to understand the difference is when you want to show possession (their dog), or something that is belonging to someone/ someones (their house, their thoughts, their phones) = their. 'The' is used as an article that comes before a noun, it is used differently that 'their'. If I say 'The dog', i'm talking about a specific dog, but i'm not talking about 'who' owns the dog. 

Great Job by the way!!

I hope this helps, if you have any questions, feel free to ask :)

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