Correct what sounds strange please. Not just grammar
In the morning my brother told me that I'm to assist him in buying OATS for his stallion. I didn't have much options, I don't think, so by the afternoon we were at the needed place. It was a big HANGAR with one of its walls PROPPED UP with METAL CHANNELS fastened in the concrete. It was an old building obviously. The big gates were slid open so we left the car outside and entered the hangar. Once inside, the first thing to grab my attention were huge heaps of grains. Later on I picked up on pillars that supported the roof. They were made of metal tubes and some of them were actually bent. Probably when backing up with big cars.
We'd approached one of heaps and started filling our bags with oats. My brother would take an empty bag, put its top to the oats and then simply drag them in with his palms till it was around half full. Then he'd pass it to another guy, who in his turn would keep its top open for me so that I could fill it to the top with a snow SHOVEL. The bags would be bound at the top with a TWINE and stocked. Eventually we came up with something like 100 bags filled, which made 3-4 tons in total. My brother's SHARE was 26 bags, and the rest was for our relatives' and acquaintances' horses. Now all these 26 bags are in the barn, ready to make “cereal” from.
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Correct what sounds strange please. Not just grammar
In the morning, my brother told me that I'm to assist him in buying OATS for his stallion. [1] I didn't have many [2] options, I thought, so by the afternoon we were at the place we needed to be. It was a big HANGAR with one of its walls PROPPED UP with METAL CHANNELS [3] fastened in the concrete. It was an old building obviously. The big gates were slid open, so we left the car outside and entered the hangar. Once inside, the first thing to grab my attention were huge piles/heaps of grain. Later on I noticed pillars that supported the roof. They were made of metal tubes [4] and some of them were actually bent. They were probably bent when backing up with big cars.We'd approached one of heaps and started filling our bags with oats. My brother would take an empty bag, put its opening up to the oats and then simply scoop/drag them in with his palms till the bags were around half full. Then he'd pass it to another guy, who in his turn would keep its top open for me so that I could fill it to the top with a snow SHOVEL. The bags would be bound at the top with a piece of TWINE [5] and stacked. Eventually, we came up with something like 100 bags filled, which made 3 to 4 tons in total. My brother's SHARE was 26 bags, and the rest was for our relatives' and acquaintances' horses. Now all of these 26 bags are in the barn, ready to make “cereal” [6] from.
[1] "I'm to assist him" is correct, but rather formal. If you want to speak more colloquially, say, "he told me that he wanted me to help him to buy oats for his horse." Use "horse" instead of "stallion," unless it is important to make it clear that the horse is a male.
[2] Use "many" with countable nouns.
[3] I'm not a construction contractor, but I don't think that "channel" is the correct word. Perhaps the walls are propped up with "steel rods" fastened to the wall. If the steel rods were embedded in the concrete, it would be called "rebar".
[4] Were they really "tubes"? Tubes are hollow, and I would be surprised that someone would use tubes to support a roof. Perhaps they were solid metal "rods"?
[5] Variant: "... with twine ..."
[6] Not being a horseman, I don't know why "cereal" has to be "made". Oats are already a cereal.
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